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3am
Its 3am,
I feel numb
Im slowly dying
Feeling the tears roll down my cheeks
Unable to sleep
Broken
Its 3am
I havent slept in days
Unable to eat even a piece of toast without feeling disappointed in myself
Im broken.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words:
Keep in mind this is just my raw feelings and thoughts, I just need to let my feelings out every once in a while
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
c lynn brooks
Tue, 2020-05-26 09:47
hunter
welcome
here are a few suggestions for you to consider
1- spell out your numbers
it's three in the morning
2-you are not broken
Chrys
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Lavender
Tue, 2020-05-26 11:11
3am
Hello, Hunter,
I agree. Poetry certainly is an amazing resource to let out our feelings, especially at 3 a.m.
Thank you,
Lavender