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21st Century Trumpeteer [Sunku Workshop]

"Shit hole"
hard to fix
for Commander

"Fire and Fury"
his empty threat

his Trumpets
to raise alarm

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You use allusions here nicely.
Rhythm is alarming and engaging.
The first line screams.
Looks good to me.

I am not familiar with cultural refs, though. But I am sure other readers will be more understanding.


Thanks for the read and to know you found this interesting....obviously this has reference to the compulsive and impulsive Tweeter from your home town Washington...smiles...


raj (sublime_ocean)

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Lol, that much I have comprehended.


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