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Editing - rough draft

Complicating Poetry

Then twas okay
there wasn't much else to do or say .
.today there are scores of hobbies
and
games on the Internet to play
can't we all have our own say
in simpler nuances
if I may so say .....

My master taught me
abab ab abc abc then aaabb cc
and
then I took off from there
abcd.... dcba
then free for all combination
thus I created free verse poetry
for better or worse
still many stalwarts do read
my verse...
thanks to thee..

Loathing

Renting space in the back of my mind,
Twisting, turning, making me blind.
Moving me backward and forward in time,
with thoughts of hatred, blood and grime.

Ever so tedious, never just plain,
Eating my conscience again and again.
When will this lift, suspension begin
This constance of evil that's brewing within.

To the Aged

As a boy I ran
foolhardy and strong
working with the aged
all day long

a song on my lips
with chatter so spry
"One day You shall
see You'll be old like
me" said one old
sage so quiet and dry

the stories I've been
and the places of bold
how how warning said
then Unheeded was sold
by my too busy heart
How my body had paid
for the task of the part

LIES

A drop of soul and dust did brew
The fruit of love was true
The delicate vessel I became
I carried alone our passion's flame

The breath of a dear one I did hold
I watched the magic unfold
That precious gift of unity
Of nature held then within me

Love-seeds under the starry sky
We sowed together...you and I
So why did you do this, tell me, why?
Why did you let our love tree die?

.....

What we crafted now asks of you
What do I say, what do I do?

Embodiment Accepted

If I were to have any choice,
ere the end beckons,
I'd opt for you as my nurse
and
as you come closer
and
clasp my hands,
the warmth shall flow between you and me
then surely death which eludes
will surely pass by.
even though with kith and kin of my own,
With you I shan't feel alone
the current seeps through my spine
and I erect as before .

~ Meadow of Yore~

I was captured by your sha
Chained by your magick
Imprisoned
Your soul holds me fast
I cannot escape ~

Once,
I was so alone
Fire consumed me
as She sought me out
Dragons summoned me ~

I was called up upon the wind
My name echoed through the ages
My spirit melted into flesh
My psyche
became a sharpened sword ~

Her voice whispered,
memories into my heart
Her smell shocked
my brain with power
I seen her face
upon the ancient shore ~

BY AND BY

Though you are now gone
loving memories shall keep you near
Until I see you once again
in another tomorrows by and by

Winter

The golden summer
came and went,
the autumn leaves
now mostly spent,

Gather deep before the cold,
while Jack-frost waits
till autumns sold,

The naked trees
point to the sun,
clothes scattered
on their beds for fun

they stand embarrassed
in light of day,
reaching for the sky
as if to pray

All living creatures
that would abound,
now rarely seen
on this frozen ground,

Lobster Boats

Lobster boats at anchor sway
To the rhythm of the tidal swell.
Waiting for another work day
Lobster boats at anchor sway.
Dancing on the surging bay
To the sound of a plaintive bell.
Lobster boats at anchor sway
To the rhythm of the tidal swell.

Distant (constructive feedback ws) Updated

Distant

when it began
I do not know
signs were there
they'd failed to show

road you traveled
full of holes
soul washed up
on rocky shoals

lack of feeling
in dead eyes
which speak to me
implicit lies

no longer caring
you confess
the draining of
all tenderness

you have become
a promise broken
leaving behind
a tale unspoken

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