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Complicating Poetry

Submitted by loved on Sat, 2012-05-26 01:07

Then twas okay
there wasn't much else to do or say .
.today there are scores of hobbies
and
games on the Internet to play
can't we all have our own say
in simpler nuances
if I may so say .....

My master taught me
abab ab abc abc then aaabb cc
and
then I took off from there
abcd.... dcba
then free for all combination
thus I created free verse poetry
for better or worse
still many stalwarts do read
my verse...
thanks to thee..

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Rula

Sat, 2012-05-26 04:05

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Well expressed dear loved .I understand
what you are saying but I am
sure your words will more glitter when
you rhyme and follow a meter..

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loved

Sat, 2012-05-26 08:31

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for me 'tis mouthwatering ..
shall have to learn
though its late in the evening of life,
the sun is now about to set..
But still
continue I will

loved

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weirdelf

Sat, 2012-05-26 12:27

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freeform and new formalism are fantastic, and not mutually exclusive.

But this poem is not fantastic, it's a wee whine.

Loved, your 'twas's and 'thee's deny your free poetry. And your persistently self-reflexive themes deny content.

Rula might disagree with me, but I suggest - don't write about your poetry and who reads you, write about beauty, passion, lies, truth etc etc see my signature,

cheers,
Jess
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loved

Sat, 2012-05-26 13:50

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in full...
Loved, your 'twas's and 'thee's deny your free poetry. And your persistently self-reflexive themes deny content.

see my signature,
SEEN

loved

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