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Lonnie
Jul 09, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Infestation

                    Infestation



                An ancient God awakens,
                stretching fungus-grey tentacles
                towards the distant light;
                summoned by discordant chants
                and primordial sorcery

                He is neither good nor evil,
                but transcends both
                in his appetite for cosmic chaos;
                wallowing in his own filth,
                he slithers toward life

                A portal opens,
                and dragon-headed avatars
                roar of his arrival;
                then, slake their thirst
                on the blood of his minions

                Famished, he feeds,
                first on the chosen,
                then on the innocent;
                tasting no difference
                as he ingests their essence

                He copulates with demons,
                rendering them mindless
                as they devour his seed;
                then, he waits patiently,
                for the inevitable birth of humanity


               C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
— Lonnie, Jul 09, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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poewriter58

15 years 11 months ago

Wow

Very vivid imagery in this poem. Makes one cringe away in fear and disgust another gem from the pro love ya Me
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Dear!

Although I do hate to see you cringe! LOL!! Something just seemed to compel me to write this one, and so I did!
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Dalton

15 years 11 months ago

neither good nor evil

He is neither good nor evil but transcends them both very true, very knowing my favourite lines. I like this poem, very much indeed
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Dalton!

I don't often use this form, but with this particular theme, it seemed to work better! Glad you approve!
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

infestation

Who says free verse isn't more effective with an underlying structure? NOT I.Guess we both need to venture to the unfamiliar occasionally eh,Lonnie.Stars speak to quality of work.......scribbler
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Stan!

Yeah, we do need to stretch ourselves a bit poetically and leave our familiar comfort zones! Thanks for reading this and I'm glad you liked it!
weirdelf

weirdelf

15 years 11 months ago

oh man! dark, dark,

oh man! dark, dark, dark! And you know what? Honestly you are the only poet I know who pull it off without sounding like a deathmetal teenager or a suicidal drama queen. Bloody brilliant, mate! Great to see you pushing the envelope with your structure and form too. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Jess!

As you well know, I always value your critiques greatly, and I am very pleased with your views on this piece! I will try and push that envelope even further in the future!
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lonnie

I wasnt sure what to expect but this ?? is brilliant ... vote and a nomination ... nothing really I can see to change :) bravo !!!! love and hugs JayCee P.S and Jess hit the nail on the head :) (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, JayCee!

Your approval of a piece is akin to a Blessing, and I will always endeavor to solicit your blessings!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lonnie

Your dark side is as brilliant as your bright side. I found a shiver up my spine as I read this piece. My favorite lines: He copulates with demons, rendering them mindless as they devour his seed; then, he waits patiently, for the inevitable birth of humanity Always, Cat
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, dear Lady!

Gee, if I can make the Witch shiver, I must be getting better! LOL!!! Hey, seriously, thank you so much for reading and leaving a nice comment!
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

just about

what all have said ahead of me wowowowowowoow just W O W
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Loved!

I'm happy you enjoyed this, and thanks for reading and leaving such a nice comment!
loved

loved

15 years 10 months ago

thanks an add on now

///He copulates with demons, rendering them mindless as they devour his seed; then, he waits patiently, for the inevitable birth of humanity///// u speak the truth about a future generation 9 MONTHS AND THIRTY YEARS AWAY i know u have also seen AVATAR in life's REAL ANIMATION SO HAVE A GOOD DAY TILL THE NEW GENERATION COMES UR WAY LOVELYLOVEDLYHONEYVISIONARY =ME
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

Yep, This is good!

I wish I could think of another word for amazing, as that is such a generic term for your work! :D
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Lil Z!

I don't usually work in this particular format, but I thought, what the Hell, might as well deviate a little and throw everyone a curve ball! Thanks for reading and commenting, and I'm glad you liked this!
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Green Eyes!

It's good to know that I can please people with what I write! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and leave a nice comment!
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

"Fabulous"

I saw all of your poem in my mind its absolutely brilliant,i love your dark side too i couldnt choose a favourite Stanza as they all spoke so loudly! you are very inspiring Lonnie! much love shirl.... shirley harrison
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Shirley!

Your kind words are most welcome as always! I'm glad you found something in this that spoke to you! Thanks again for reading and commenting!
Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

So, That was the birth

of evil! lol Sounds like the beginning of a good book. You say he is neither good nor evil, yet he sows the seeds of chaos and discord. Bloody gave me shivers and I found myself reading with this horrid look upon my face! I can appreciate the style you chose to write in. I do believe I like your rhyming work a smidgen better though. You do such a great job with your wording and flow on them. Still, well done, again! Always, Tonya
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Tonya!

Yeah, have to switch styles every once in a blue moon! I prefer the rhyme and meter as well, but have to show my versatility periodically so I don't look like a doggerel writer! Thanks for the nice comments!