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an ancient light, gathering

the moon mirrored the spine of her intent,
and so she had become a castaway in the gluttony of her need,
a temporal goddess cast out into the sea,
she was without voice,

she had been born near the turn of a key,
on the western island of the peridot, blood lay
thickly upon the sand and memories rose to the
surface like a crown of redemption

she lay
suspended in the web of his arms, his tongue
crucifying her against his will, his pleasure
shook the earth from under her hips and they found
what all lovers find, blood lay thickly carpeted
upon the sand

memories rose from the sea,
spilling over
like a necklace of stars in the night
like an ancient light making love to the crescent moon,
rolling clouds across their eyes....

— Kailashana, Jun 30, 2010

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Damo

15 years 11 months ago

The moon/water/tidal theme

The moon/water/tidal theme is strong and beautiful...Passionate poetry - moonlit sexy...Your words are all ways so concentrated...All ways worth re-reading to really let it wash over!
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

"wow" Anna

very passionate poetry "i love your heart" much love shirl..... shirley harrison
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest ~

memories rose from the sea, spilling over like a necklace of stars in the night I have seen such necklaces appearing from the sea as the sun goes down you've inspired me again love and biggest hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Anna

Although the all the lines are perfectly splendid, I like these best: memories rose from the sea, spilling over like a necklace of stars in the night like an ancient light making love to the crescent moon, rolling clouds across their eyes…. Always, Cat
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

I'll try

Good visuals in passionate write.Did blood on sand represent loss of virginity? just a muddling.........scribbler
Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you all for reading

Thank you all for reading and your graciousness. Shri Scribbler, I was wondering who was going to ask that question, Ha! Blood is life and life is blood. In all its appearances. virginity war suffering illness initiation ritual accident heroism birth death art life love ~A The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Conservatives is to prevent the mistakes from being corrected. G.K. Chesteron