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Jun 20, 2010
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Sharing a Breath of Life
I smell the fruit
of the persimmon tree
and a haunting begins
as shivers run free
of the road ahead
and one laying behind
I sweep them all up
and out of my mind
as a shadow appears
and is far past the veil
his robes swung out
like wind in a sail
in his eyes is an evil
that glitters the dark
the cut of his mouth
like the score of a mark
his hair of serpents
reach out in glee
and it was then I held
my soul close to me
his reason for coming
was that I had sold,
my soul for a life
that no air does hold
but I found out, that
sometimes god forgives,
in my sacrifice was found
the very reason I live
someone had perished
so I could breathe air,
but what I would give now
if we could have just shared
— Seren, Jun 20, 2010
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Candlewitch
15 years 11 months ago
Dearest Jayne
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
Cat
xena465
15 years 11 months ago
A life for a life
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
I love that you got the
CyberSpace
15 years 11 months ago
A gentle rhythm to this one
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
a gentle funeral march eh ?
raj
15 years 11 months ago
Hi JayCee
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
Hes gone from this plain Raj
shirley harrison
15 years 11 months ago
JC
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
Dear Shirley
lou
15 years 11 months ago
JayCee
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
Dear Lou
DawningDaytripper
15 years 11 months ago
You don’t make it easy
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
Dear Julie
yenti
15 years 11 months ago
No Sale Today
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
Big Smile
Geezer
15 years 11 months ago
What if?...
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
Dearest Gee
Geezer
15 years 11 months ago
'S OK...