Seren

Jun 17, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Blood on the Stairs of Hope

If I sit for a thousand nights
of crescent moons
stitching new stars
to the firmament

Would you give
me a moment
of perfect ?...

If I polished the black
until the stars of your
eyes, shone brighter
than the stars themselves

would you accept
that I am sorry
for everything
between the beginning
of now and the next life,
but that I have
to stop saying it ?...

I sit in the thousand
sighs within my memories
I wait with patience
guiding my hands,
over the satin of time

and I hope for peace, even

as the blood stars
a trail of battle
over the steps of fate
and it seeps under my door ...

— Seren, Jun 17, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

Mmmmmmmmmmm. Mmmm.Girl….

Mmmmmmmmmmm. Mmmm. Girl.... you keep growing into yourself.....praise and jubilation from an unlikely source. ;-) ~A The ultimate measure of a man is not where he stands in moments of comfort, but where he stands at times of challenge and controversy. ~ Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr.

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

thanks Ma … your comment

thanks Ma ... your comment made smiley tears thanks big hugs of love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

CyberSpace

15 years 11 months ago

Baby this is one of your

Baby this is one of your best and that ending is brilliant ... ome time I wish I could nominate you but i wont so the nazis dont beat you with their big sticks love you baby Snake xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

thanks my love and I know it

thanks my love and I know it irks you but its better that I dont see spotlight and we both know why ;) love you x x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Jayne

I am always amazed at your depth of feeling and breadth of your imagination. One of your best. Cannot pick a favorite line for I love them all equally. Love, Cat

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Cat

I wrote this one tonight, with peace it just came from the ether ... thanks for the lovely comment this is one of few ive posted the day ive written it lol for ages love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lou

15 years 11 months ago

JayCee

lovely write love lou xx

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lou

Thanks heaps glad you liked it love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

pleiades

15 years 11 months ago

but i hope for

but i hope for peace... would you consider and i hope for peace...? sigh.........seren, how very beautiful stunning opening 2 stanzas the sense of beauty about this is very strong emotive, evocative, and just so damned gorgeous! again...i sigh cheers p nominated [bugger the nazis]

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear P

So glad you like it ... its for you lol ... inspired by something you said in our messages ... and I had 'and' and changed it to 'but' changed back now, I totally agree with you but when I was writing it I wasnt sure whether to put and or but lol thanks for the help love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

I can only hope

that my avatar inspired the title :) I stumbled just a little bit at the end of the second stanza. You trail off with the asterisks, but I felt like that didn't quite work. Loved, loved, loved the imagery, and as Anna said, it's definitely beautiful to see you growing into yourself with each new wonderful write you grace us with! Kelsey "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Alylan Poe

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Kels

inspired by another poet for that poet and the title yes, smile came from your avatar I wondered if you would see it lol will take a look at that second stanza next week only wrote this one yesterday and will find a fix for that stanza ... going to let this baby have a rest I flogged it in the edits last night lol hugs and big smile love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

magics02

15 years 11 months ago

Really nice

I needed to read something positive here and I find it right here on your page. I really like this write Jayne. Spoke volumes to me also. Great again lady Mona xoxo

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Mona

I am so glad you got the message .. because at heart I am a battler but in reality peace is all I seek ... just a small measure of peace and I am a happy woman lucky I have a small slice of it here at home in the love of my family and friends I feel blessed and wish it for others ... sometimes even when we are unlucky in life we are still blessed ... ive been unlucky but damn ive been blessed and thankful of it this ones inspired by our Pleiades thanks for the comment M x x x love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Tragic_Bliss

15 years 11 months ago

I really liked this.. it

I really liked this.. it kinda spoke to me and reminded me of my friend ..

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear TM

Thanks for the lovely comment .. if it speaks to you its good poetry and thats a wonderful compliment will have to look out for some work from you smile love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

anonymous1

15 years 11 months ago

I love this poem

I love the pleading questions and sorrow. I love, 'would you accept that I'm sorry...but I have to stop saying it.' It's just so graceful and self-accepting. Thank you, JayCee. Lisa

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lisa

I was messaging P over the last couple of weeks and something we discussed sparked this write lol funny it wasnt really what we spoke about but ... there you have it thanks for the read and the comment much appreciated love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Nordic cloud

15 years 11 months ago

If stars could speak they would still be speechless!

Ann of Norway Their great spread of life's history within their hearts, the core of our existence, those constellations of fiery, icy, ever changing elements, that shine for us, some from as long ago as 15,000 years; they are awesome and from their awesome aspect you have thrown up a poem of you desires, you aspire to be a star yourself, and if they do not answer this, it will be because they love you too much and cannot speak, because if stars could speak they would still be speechless! Love you JayCee and your poetry is so wonderful.

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Ann

Your comment made me cry darlin ... such beautiful smiley tears my nana told me when i was little no matter what, never stop dreaming and I did for a while but I am dreaming new planets and stars in a pure belief that there is a reality of that somewhere love and hugs JayCee x x x (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)