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Silence; Mon Ami (edit)

I pine for
the comfort of silence

my spirit bends to warp
in the rush of life
streaming all
around me,
in it,
I find a vow
just where I left it
dusty but whole


taking it up,
it unfolds and opens
onto the steps of being

in the discard,
I made
my first mistake,
but in finding it
again,
a pure miracle
is made real


my feet sink
into the ever
darkening shades
of black,
in the cold grip
of eternities hands


I am now the darkness
cradled in black cotton
seeping for nothing,
and the silence
of quiet moments
I now find rest
in the emptiness

but surprisingly
another road
materialized
traveling my horizon,
it teased my peripheral

and invited me to look,
so I did
I found that all it took,
to find perfect stillness?

was to become
a contour
of silhouette,
in the smudge
on your horizon


Adieu Mon Ami


— Seren, May 07, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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yenti

yenti

16 years 1 month ago

Silence

There is very little silence in being little one it is that you are a creation of Spirit, of energy and love I do not know how they create a new life force as these things are usually hidden from us here as we tend to this life and its testing of our ways. That You are a creation is all that you need, you will never lose any part of you as it is whole and when one day you can see others as yourself the light will be so bright but then you will belong, we always say to others go in the light , I guess that is what it is to be yourself with others, I am sorry I have been rather tired of late but will try to write something for the stream this week. Your piece as usual though complex was lovely to see, Yours Ian.T
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ian

I think we have both been very tired of late,just found your latest earlier, I am going to be away for a few days this week thanks for the lovely comment I have been down in the dumps the last couple of weeks I am slowly coming good though... love and big hugs of thanks Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Jayne

I completely agree with Ian and my favorite lines are: I am the darkness cradled in black cotton seeping for nothing, and the silence in quiet moments superb... Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Cat

I got a couple of hours today so I thought I would see what you all been doing .. I am sending a private email in a little while you should have it when you wake up I had done an edit on this one see what you think now its tweaked love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

It is interesting how we

It is interesting how we look for silence and not realize it is there inside us, all along. It's always a miracle to see what gifts others bring, my darling Jayne-Chloe. In the marketplace the silence deafens above the roar of the greasepaint our faces wear inside the ocean of our solitude Love. ~ "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

For me it doesnt matter how

For me it doesnt matter how many times I lose my quiet I always find it in the end ... and sometimes its the clash of neurons sending me silly making it hard to find ;) your the gift that is present ... beautiful verse it made me tear up (hugs) love Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Beautiful JayCee

Sometimes I love the silence in my life, but at times it scares me too. I have my TV or music on all the time, but when I turn them off and just sit, there's nothing around me...except of course Zak chewing yet another piece of my furniture. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Rosina

What you sometimes find scary is for me nirvana .... even though (like now i am sitting here with music blaring in my head) while I sit and type lol when its nightime I like just being in the silence ... its soothes my spirit thanks for the lovely comment hun I am going to see what you been up to shortly love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
hobo

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

sometimes I long

sometimes I really long for silence but it seems that I do things that drives the silence away, nice stuff
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Hobo

I love the silence ... but rarely have any lol ... hmmm driving the silence away?, do you like playing with power tools ? sorry giggle ... god when I find silent peace I hold on as long as I can my life gets hectic sometimes and ... silence is bliss its when I write my best stuff ... love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 1 month ago

Jayne, It always seems to

Jayne, It always seems to me that you write without effort. You make it look so easy!This one gave me goosebumps. Elizabeth
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Elizabeth

Sometimes, not always, I sit down and its like they just flow but I have to work most of the time lol and they dont always work out great, i have more failed poems than finished ones and thats huge thanks for the comment and goosebumps ?? is a compliment love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
M

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Beauty here

Jayne This is very good. Your sharp mind and love of life and all that's in it shows up vividly in your writes aussie lady. Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Mona

Just read the lovely poem you wrote for your mum its just wonderful , thanks for the lovely comment hun the minds not always sharp believe me lol ... I dont do mornings, ever, thanks again for the visit and the read you have a wonderful mothers day when it gets there love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
N

ngaioBeck

16 years ago

Silence

Some every once in awhile more pecious than golden oratory. Well Done!
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Ngaio

thanks so much for the comment .. sorry to be late answering ive been in bed sick all week silence is a commodity I dont get much of here so its very precious to me lol love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")