ziggy

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A QUEST

it`s everything i know the journey
taking me back returning to what
I know, stepping off revolving doors
skipping through the corridors .

beat the drum slow absorbing its
resonance taking time to dwell
without peace or hell , those
moments where I stretch my limbs
on the hammock of bliss happy
with my lot where I came from and
how I was begot .

peaceful serenity within the quest
along the way to where mocking
birds exalt gifted reason .

what`s there to be is an elongated
mystery since and before the reason
for man and history blistered mountains
shaping obstacles conquered .

never free`d from our short comings
till conscious breath abates, end
game awaits .

— ziggy, Apr 21, 2010

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Critiques

lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Enda

Very vivid, I can see you lying there in your hammock, pondering, going forth and no more backwards, which some of us do do. Guilty, lol. Your words have expressed all, well. I will not grill u over your capitals as I usually do, or commas etc, but, the ending, should you add, the- game awaits. Just a thought. I stumbled is all. Freed, fix it, lol. I hope your quest brings grand times for you and your poem is on that scale of grand, I cant wait to catch up on your others. I have missed a lot, so keep up the wonderful poetry. Keep pondering as well, if it helps to write like this , get back into your hammock. lol. Love and chat soon Nana Lyz. XX

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

my dear lyz

hi there good to get a comment from you my dear , i tend to use all capitals or none at all , the softer seemed to suit this write right or wrong time will tell , to be honest i sort of like the ending as is will see what our neo tree thinks lol thank you for always being there always ,,,ziggy

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ziggy

I have to disagree with Nana lol I think without the 'the' lol but like I always say its your write ... really well written ... there wasa surrealist feel to this one I liked immensely love and hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

hi

hi am late replying but better late than ,,,,,,,,, lol i made that change you suggested and when i went back to edit it stood out like a sore thumb lol , cheers ,zigs

lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Hi guys, he, he.

Maybe a comma then, lol. Anyway, as for the poem, it is grand. I love it. Love to u both. XX

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

loll

lol thank you for popping in again always,, ,ziggy ,but mostly just ,,,,,enda lol

lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Ya bugger

I could not get on before so I have no time tonight, but hey, had to reply, lol. I think your poem, Quest, is really great, no matter how I feel about the comma, etc, lol. You just keep producing writes like this my man. Marvelous. XX

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

lol

hi lyz ha ha , cheers lyz you do make me smile and i thank you for it , hope all is well with you and yours chat soon ,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Great descriptions Ziggy

Took me on a journey nicely. Rosina xena465

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

hi

hi and thank you glad you read this ............zigy i`ll pop by your page soon when i get a minute lol ,,,,,,,,,,,

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ziggy

The journey is everything for this phase of our lives, for the journey leads us to that great last adventure. I loved your imagery and descriptions. This piece I deeply feel. Always, Cat p.s. Only one suggestion: when speaking/writing of yourself, use the upper case "I" instead of "i" as "I" is a proper noun.

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

hi

hello cheers cat i am so gald you read this as i thought you might get it , and i made them changes lol i just thanked jayne for it thinking it was her and not you who said it o well thank you cat it was so plain to be seen when I went back to look cheers ,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Z., I’m always

Dear Z., I'm always pleasantly surprised when I read your work. I agree with you on the end. I like it as it is. peaceful serenity within the quest along the way to where mocking birds exalt gifted reason Just perfect! P.

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

hi

hi wat a lovely comment cheers and you picked out my own fav line in this thank you for that ,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy x

raj

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Ziggy…the flow of your

Hi Ziggy...the flow of your poem/journey resonates so well with your introspection and mood...i liked it...raj..

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

hi

hello there thank you for the read and comment must check your words out love your pen name ,,,zigs

seabhac

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Ziggy

Great feel to this My favourite lines were resonance taking time to dwell without peace or hell A time of no time ...O.k so there was one tiny thing I stumbled on and that was in the first verse it`s everything i know (,)the journey taking me back returning to what I know, stepping (of ?)revolving doors skipping through the corridors . It changes the whole emphasis on the first line as in the eats shoots and leaves example. Second point was the relvoving door...stepping off???the of doesn't make sense to me Hope you get good hammock weather over the weekend to help you ponder on this one... Hugs Seabhac

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

hi there

thank you for you insightful comment seabhac i take your point on the (,) and the of(f) but i dont think i will do to much with this just yet cheers and thank you have a good weekend ,,,,,,,zigs

loved

16 years 1 month ago

once again

....at the proper place Now I know The charm of begetting And Spotting Is to read more, Write less And Once a week no more Many will stress And Your words full of metaphors Is a gift divine? And I hope sometimes You shall read Some direct ones of mine. LOVED STILL.

loved

16 years 1 month ago

The charm Of Begetting

Now I know The charm of begetting And Spotting Is to read more, Write less And Once a week no more Many will stress And Your words full of metaphors Is a gift divine? And I hope sometimes You shall read Some direct ones of mine. LOVED STILL.