Seren

Apr 14, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Sharing a Dream

I watch a shadow
run me down,
as it gets closer
my breathing
slows

no death in dark garb
but malice,
intent on grinding
my bones into
the grain

of my nightmare,

when I wake
no more, he will
step back
from the shadow
and live again

while ever I breathe,
he will hate on hate
having to share
the same planet

with someone
who is a waste,
of perfectly good space
between his eyes,

he will never get me out
as I am ingrained
in his nightmare,

he dwells
in all of mine

— Seren, Apr 14, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Jayne

It goes hand in hand and would seem to me like you are married or mated to your nightmare character. I like this poem, it is dark and gloomy and I am in a dark and gloomy mood. Thanks for your kindness on my blog and poem. I much appreciate it. *hugs Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Cat

This poem is a long time coming ... in a way I am linked to this person forever and in my nightmares for the last 24 yrs Cat my heart goes out to you in this sad time I wish there were words I could share that would help you feel better but right now there arent words just offering a hand and a hug across oceans ((((hugs)))) Love Jayne-Chloe x x x (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

Nightmare Share...

Dwelling in the hall, of your nightmare schemes It's easier to escape, than it really seems Put to death, the spector, of eternal hate Lays down his scary scythe, and meets his awful fate Forgetting is his doom, he dissolves in dreadful tears His strength was in remembrance, in the making of your fears. A great poem, you have written, wish you the best in leaving him far, far behind. Higgest bugs, and lotta love, ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Fortunately I can leave him

Fortunately I can leave him far behind but my nightmares after 24 yrs have never abaited .... glad you liked this one and I love the verse you wrote theres a poem there somewhere dear Gee love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Suberb JayCee

I've had many a nightmare and the ones that we keep dreaming about are the ones that haunt us forever. Well written and held me deep in thought. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Rosina

This nightmare is apart of me as much as my eyes ... I will never get rid of it but I can start writing it out,glad you liked it hun thanks for the read love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!

raj

16 years 1 month ago

JCthis is very reflective

JC this is very reflective and emotive expression of imprints unseen to the naked eye...but very alive in the mind which refuses to let go... best wishes...raj..

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Raj

Thanks for your comment ... it is alive to a point ... in me kind regards Jayne-Chloe (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!

loved

16 years 1 month ago

nightmarish

excellent poetry loved it

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Loved

will be round later tonight catching up will see what you ahve been up too thanks for the read and the comment I am happy you liked it love and hugs Jayne-Chloe (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!

loved

16 years 1 month ago

I SHALL AWAIT

I still await Ur comments On a few poems Someone has condemned Some are born to crush and damn Why they were not drowned In that dam

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Loved

I already commented and did a small edit on one of your poems earlier hun lol love JayCee (Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll)

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

malice

one of the worst daemons jc send those waves of love to him. lol and hugs judd xxx

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Judd

I hope I never see him again but every now and then I see him in the street and my blood runs cold ... the night before I wrote this I had a really bad nightmare and thought maybe I can write him out lol love to you and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Wow , Fab imagination for a poem!

Hi JC Just dropped by to see one of yours, well breathtaking Excellently written, i dream like i have 2 lives so when i wake up often i think its real, spooky but lovely, sorry i havent been to visit been so busy with my Paddy Mcgee! shirley harison

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

LOL thanks for the visit …

LOL thanks for the visit ... I will get back round in the next couple of days and play catch up with everyones writes been pretty crook and see what your Paddy's been up to lol ... glad you liked this one its funny I have the most vivid dreams lol in colour and I have been told thats unusual lol ... love and biggest hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Naylor

16 years 1 month ago

Your words are so deeply

Your words are so deeply felt as I read them ... Powerful imagery to works so well with the style in which you wrote this !! Beautifully done ... you have such strength and through your words here it shines through :) ((((HUG))))

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Naylor

thanks so much for your comment glad you liked this ones its a bit different lol love and hugs JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Mariposa

16 years 1 month ago

So sad!

I feel your pain in this poem, JayCee. I wish for a triumphant ending that I know there will be, you would never. ever be "someone/ who is a waste/ of perfectly good space". I hope you're doing better soon. Love and Hugs, Your sister in Ink, Jhena

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dera Jhena

there is pain in this one it felt like I bled this one out ... thanks so much for the read its not more normal fare this one ... ((hugs)) thanks for the boost love in ink Jayne-Chloe x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Licia

This is a living nightmare I guess you could say that seeps into my dreams ... thanks for the read I am glad you liked this one thanks so much for the read and the comment ... love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Alice Ember

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Seren

This is kind of how I am feeling because i am having nightmares like this about my cousin's death check it out if you want. It's called cousin Frankie Love, Alice Carrying your own battle scars is a sign of your own strength. Carrying others battle scars is a sign of your very soul.

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Alice

So sorry to hear of your loss, there are no words when we loose someone close but writing it out does help ... I promise to take a look at that for you in the morning its late and I am a bit under the weather thanks for the read I really appreciate it love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:- Death is the great adventure beside which moon landings and space trips pale into insignificance. Addison Joseph")