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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Apr 02, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

AFTER YOU


After youand the knowing of youthere will be no more.No music, or sweat inducing sunshine, Blue notes on Sundays only for jazz lovers andhedonists heady on wine.Abhorting this journey, disembarking from the train.- without you there can be no destination

   my heart derailed.There is no other view from here -only dark clouds and rain.  There will be no dawn at sunrise.only a treacherous edging downthis mountain so perilous,there can be no turning round.Still,I the discarded libertine,Job's concubine, cannot stop looking back to see if your hand is there reaching out for mine..." BjR 2 April, '10    
— Bonitaj, Apr 02, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Critiques

Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Boni

Wonderful poetry really one of your best and I love Auden ;) love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

Wow Jayne!

You've just given me goosebumps! Thanks for the vote of confidence... THis one just welled up from a very sore part of me today! cheers Boni
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Wonderful wonderful poem,

Wonderful wonderful poem, Boni; I have to agree with JC, one of your very best. At first glance I wanted the last word to be *mine*... ~A "Your task is not to seek for love, but merely to seek and find all the barriers within yourself that you have built against it." ~ A Course In Miracles
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Boni I love Annas Idea for

Boni I love Annas Idea for the last word ... Mine would have so much more punch awesome suggestion Mum ~! love JayCee
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

Your wish

is my command! THanks ladies, especially to Anna's astute eye. I have tweaked a few other areas - see what you think! Boni
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odd molly

16 years 2 months ago

a piece of me will always be

a piece of me will always be with you farewell as ash blows away to nothing as if never..... came to my mind when I read your poem which I found very beautifully written yes very beautiful. love. o molly
chumfin

chumfin

16 years 2 months ago

nice meeting you

Boni, i love this poem most especially for the serenity it conjures, its very soft and touching , i also love the flow and your used of words. its well done piece. BEST REGARDS chumfin
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Boni

You've earned each and every one of these five stars. I cannot pick favorite lines because the whole poem is fantastic. I love the way this piece is worded. One of your best to date. Always, Cat
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Sad but

a wonderful play on words, very expressive and in agreeance, maybe one of your best. Marvelous. Love Lyz. XX
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Just lovely dear one

Left me speechless and so happy to read some positive poetry for a change, good job and very well wordy. Blessings to you and yours in the coming days Love, Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

Powerful poem Bonni.

Ann of Norway Powerful poem Bonni. How dark all seems as we walk away, and yet there is as always hope, it never fades away when it has been kindled as strongly as this. Love Ann.
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Mike

16 years 2 months ago

awesome, terrific, I could

awesome, terrific, I could go on, but yu get it by now, you seriously touched me with your words, looking forward to read more of in the near future... thank you kind regards, michael 'Perception Requires Duality'
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

THank you one and all above

for your kind comments. I am honoured and amazed that such an honest outpouring could have touched you all! It is dedicated to one special person and perhaps it's that sincerity that shines through. Ironically, he has seen it, but will neither comment or even acknowledge any of my work! Thank you for being there - what it is to have an audience!! Bonita j
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

You're half way there with this one Indi.

She was indeed his wife, but the story goes that she was told not to look back when they left Soddom & Gommorah. She did and turned into a pillar of salt. So although he went on to be blessed she sure as hell didn't! Hope that contextualizes it a bit better for you! Thanks for stopping by to comment! Boni
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

five

can't give more than five how i wish sorry be happy with this.