Seren

Mar 24, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Elemental

I watched a tree grow
as a single leaf stretched
to touch ground
its homage in the descent

heralds came laying siege
lifting a brown orphan
lost to nature

a whirlwind creates
its first movement

this is music

southern winds gust
through the hedgerow
in the Mexican wave
of mother earth

still I can hear
rhythms in the wind

as the death of stillness
is upon me

I dance, confetti
circles my head
as I touch
finger to a bloom
flying without wings

vibrating to life
in the eddy and flow
my dress dances a samba,
as hair pirouettes on end
static with excitement

braced in her hold

I am fearless
elemental that I am

— Seren, Mar 24, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

CyberSpace

16 years 2 months ago

Never met anyone that loves

Never met anyone that loves the wind like you do lol orsm poem love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxox

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

What can I say I was born in

What can I say I was born in the wind lol ;) love and hugs wifey x x x x x

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe

My favorite lines: a whirlwind creates its first movement this is music This poem is brilliant. It speaks to me on many levels. Always, Cat

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Its funny here it gets windy in the autumn and spring and I guess thats why I love those seasons so much ... thanks for the read and those lines came from nowhere I started this and got interrupted and then last night in the wind the rest came to me and I loved this one myself not often I can say that love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Mariposa

16 years 2 months ago

Exciting!

I want to join you in your dance! I want feel the wind rustlingvthe leaves! Exquisitely written, as always, Jayne-Chloe. xoxo -Jhena

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jhena

Theres a place here called Lennox head its down from Byron Bay ... well if you stand on the headland of lennox its ALWAYS windy I ahve never been there and its NOT windy ... when I lived up north I used to drive the fifteen minutes from Ballina to Lennox drive right up to the headland it was my peaceful place still think of it everynow and then its just one of those places that the heart longs to dance again ;) love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

saw it

and felt it all in slow motion beautiful love and hugs judd

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Judd

Then your vision is perfect (((huggles))) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

sunscreen

16 years 2 months ago

Great great write, not much

Great great write, not much left to say.

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Alex

I was going to PM you ... I have nearly finished the spoon poem and its nothing like yours but yeah who would have thought lol thanks for the read and the comment much appreciated love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

sunscreen

16 years 2 months ago

Cool, I can’t wait to see

Cool, I can't wait to see it, but then who decides the master of the spoons?

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

or mistress Alex lol ;) …

or mistress Alex lol ;) ... does it matter ? cause at the end of it we both win ;)we wrote poetry about fucking spoons for christs sake LOL ~! trust me your gonna laugh at mine lol will post it in the next couple of days ... smiles wanna know something I had fun writing it :) an I laughed lots lol ~! love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe

sunscreen

16 years 2 months ago

Well well then MR

Well well then MR Jayne-Chloe :P It does not matter at all, I already know I'm a winner! Glad you had fun writing, hopefully I'll laugh just as much as you did.

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

LOL Mister Alex … the cock

LOL Mister Alex ... the cock that crows before the sunup is eaten by foxes ;) lmao ;) love and hugs Ms Jayne-Chloe ( I am no Mrs ir Mr) just Ms

sunscreen

16 years 2 months ago

Mhh I have ninja skills,

Mhh I have ninja skills, I'll take my chances with the foxes, I'll see how they like my cock chop :P

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Edwin

Many thanks for the wonderful :) love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Chills and a tear

Something about this write was so intense, so sad, so beautiful, so vivid, the wind, and Seren with her wings of love.. I can't say nothing else, Kudos gal Kudos xoxoxoox Mona

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mona

Intense is how i feel about this one there is life and elements woven together to make it whole thanks for your kind comment love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Beautifully descriptive

I am curious as to the inspirationa source of the following lines heralds came laying siege lifting a brown orphan lost to nature It brought to mind my special place as a young girl in Ireland, a part of the south coast with a remote sea inlet where the craggy rocks had split with deep fissures and when I would stand at certain times of tide, the flow of the wave would surge the water 20ft into the air and the wind would whip the salty spray all over me. Lovely that your poem could take me back to that place I haven't thought of for many years. Thanks Seabhac

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Liz

the heralds were the first winds the brown orphans were leaves lifted to life in the wind ... it seemed as if they had a life of there own and they danced all around for ages your memory is beautiful ... I have a similar one ...I used to go to a place called Mcbrides beach, surfing diving etc and when we swum out theres a huge rock about 70 foot from shore ... I would climb to the top of the rock and the waves hitting the other side would spray and knock us off the other side ... big waves meant rarely anyone was left on top ... we had a trike and used to ride on the beach ... thanks for the trip down memory lane (hugs) love Jayne-Chloe

Skybones777

16 years 2 months ago

very good..

very good...i do wish you put more colors in to your picture of falling leafs..more colore like green or red...or blues..i do feel the breeze.. what color was the confitti?. Peace Later 8^)

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Skybones

I use colour but this was a dark night and the only colours that stood out was Green and brown ... I was trying to portray the movement and alluding to the music in the wind ... to mix colour would have taken away in my opinion from where I was trying to take it,the colour of the confetti was already mentioned brown .... think of it as concerto of night winds in green and brown kind regards Jayne-Chloe

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

When all things that seem permanent seem to move

Ann of Norway As you move us dear Jayne Oh grace and beauty flowing with your hand in ours to dance, to fly, to sing, and then we bend in honour of your pen. I want to come and dance with you dear Jayne. Your good friend Ann with Luv.

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

I bow to you my nortern

I bow to you my nortern light ... I dance and fly to sing thanks for your beautiful comment ... your welcome to dance with me any old time darlin ;) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x