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Lonnie
Feb 22, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

No Excuses

Organic lies restrict me
they convolute my thoughts
terrorize my inner eyes
and bind my soul with knots

With innocence corrupted
and sanity denied
by misspent youth and untold truth
there seems no place to hide

Society has stained me
with the blood of War
used me and abused me
like some convenient whore

My heart is like a turtle
hiding in its shell
it has a need but dares not feed
for fear of waking Hell

It's true I am a sinner
I've broken many laws
but understand that I'll be damned
if it wasn't without cause

C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
— Lonnie, Feb 22, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Critiques

jetz

jetz

16 years 3 months ago

This is awesome!! Both in

This is awesome!! Both in content, and rhythm and rhyme. I am partial to rhyming poetry though I know many are not. Seldom do I find it hard to understand the meaning of a piece if it rhymes....some of this other gibberish passed off as poetry.... well, let me leave it at that.. Nicely done. Sue
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Lonnie

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you very much, Sue!

I really appreciate you taking the time to stop by and read this and leave such a nice comment! Hopefully I can write more that you'll like in the near future!
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Lonnie

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you, Licia!

Feedback of any and all kinds is greatly appreciated! I'm very happy that you enjoyed this piece!
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

This is great. I’m in

This is great. I'm in total agreement with Sue and Lica. I loved writing and reading in rhyme and sometimes find it hard work when reading some poems that don't rhyme Well done Lonnie. Rosina xena465
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Lonnie

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you, Rosina!

It's good to see that you are still reading my poems, and that I haven't disappointed you as yet! Thank you so much for your nice comments!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

hello Lonnie

I am in agreement with all the above. The ladies that have come before me have said it all. Another great write. Always, Cat
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Lonnie

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you, Lady Cat!

It's always a pleasure to hear from you and get your feedback on one of my writes! I will be looking for another one from you soon also!
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 3 months ago

I have an un-earned rep for disliking structured verse.

I only dislike it when it is done badly, which is never the case with you. Also I often suggest to inexperienced poets that are trapped in structure to try different things. Poorly done structured verse is a fatal trap for inexperienced poets. That said this is far more compelling than your recent gothic works by reason of being deeply personal and courageous. It is without flaw that I can detect. As licia said "Aluta continua" Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
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Saiko-Johnny

16 years 2 months ago

Very special!

You have to be very old and wise to be able to write this one Lonnie...;) A little masterpiece! P.s. Are you a veteran too? Cheers, John.
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Lonnie

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you, John!

Yes, I am a Veteran of the Vietnam War! I was there in 1968-69, and was in the Army altogether from 1964 through 1971. Not the best years to have served, but, what the hell, you do what you have to do, right?