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talkingcat
Feb 09, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Different Class

The crack of class
smacked up against
train glass
littered between seats
the history of speak
different to the ears
but same love pumping
hearings' blood
— talkingcat, Feb 09, 2010

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Region, Country: Newcastle, Australia, AUS

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DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 3 months ago

Hello Dream poet, To answer

Hello Dream poet, To answer your question. Is the internal logic sound. Well not really. The history of speak, does not make sense. May I suggest. The history of dialog It should read like this, I think. Only an opinion. I had to switch a few things to make sense. Please just take what you need and keep writing, I am only trying to help. A crack in class smacked up against the trains pane. Littered between seats. The history of dialog so different to the ears but the same love hearing my blood pumping Good first post. Julie D.D.