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Train

Train whistle blowingEcho’s down the trackSee the glowing embersFalling on the track Noise of the rocking railFeel the wheels vibrateOn the track singingIts own melodyGoing clickity clack Sounds are getting strongerThe closer it getsThe power the energyExplode spiting out fireAll along the track Train still picking up the paceFaster faster round the bendsOnward through the lonely nightEndless tracks ahead Onward into the dark dark nightA never ending trackTrain whistle blowingSinging clickity clack Echo’s haunt the silenceOf the dark and lonely nightA gently rocking motionThe rhythm soothesMy beating heart
— Electric Blue, Feb 03, 2010

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Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 4 months ago

Train

E.B. Trying to feel the motion, the rythmn. Still not sure if I have got it right?
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Idlemindwondering

16 years 4 months ago

I see where you are heading

I see where you are heading but I think there is some work to be done A train has a steady beat even as it increases its speed. I am not sure what kind of critique you want so I will say i like you direction thus far. ken
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 4 months ago

Train

Ken My mind just wondering hearing the sound of a train whistle as it starts it journey gathering pace - me just rambling Thank you for looking in on my poem Electric blue
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 4 months ago

Love the revving of the

Love the revving of the engine feeling in this as this train thunders along, faster and faster - much like time moving faster as the years go - heading us down that inevitable path. Lots of good imagery in this. ~Pamela
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 4 months ago

Train

Pamela Thank you for sharing my journey. I love the steam train the smell the sounds the rocking motion as you say it is the motion of the steam getting up sound of the wheels on the track the rocking of the carraiges watching the landscape flash by when speed is up and to watch the landscape go on forever when slowing down - magic motion Electric Blue Just me rambling on a pleasant day.