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by Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Jan 11, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

Critiques

arja

16 years 4 months ago

question> L15: is it really

question> L15: is it really "failing tears" or "falling tears"? suggestion> Moonbeams and sunlight, always trying to drown out the other A continual fight, by the light of day or the dark of night

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 4 months ago

It's Failing She Doesn't Cry Openly

I was Going with Falling First But Came To failing By mistake Yes I like the shorter Version of the First stanza and just Might Use it here soon Thanks for the Question and the sugestions Donnie/Sinbad the Sailor Man

arja

16 years 2 months ago

..hi Donnie! ..this is

..hi Donnie! ..this is really heartfelt..the word "failing" works! just another query: L28:"For every one for to see.." -should this be "For everyone to see.."? ..overall, love the sentiments written herein.. ;)

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks, For Pointing that out, I often can read and re read the

Things I write and I correct them in my head, and if they aren't pointed out Or my atention is drawn to them after being away from them for a Time. I will always read them as I think i have wrote them, even if they a writting incorectly. It is odd I know, but I do it all the time, and have always done so with My writings, But with others I cacth their mistakes most of the time because I have to make them work for me. It is weird I know, but That is how my mixed up brain works when it will work. Thanks again, I think I got it right now, but only time will tell. Thanks again Sinbad/Donnie

arja

16 years 2 months ago

Oh, I fully understand what

Oh, I fully understand what you mean here.. :) I usually go through the same process.. sometimes loosing myself while writing (LOL!), then I take a rest..when I get back..the feeling is different..sometimes I just go "what was I thinking?!".. I used to have my friends in college to "proof read" my works (and its fun!), now I have NEO..