SUB ZERO

Heavy rainfall turns
silent as sleet beckons
snow ! the glistening crunch
unrolls a season slowly
passing nature embellished
picture perfect ;

Distant hills mottled blend
with an iridescent landscape
fresh imprints an unseen scurry
afoot in random scale ;

Children exhort their elders
to join as they frivolously frolic
between natures never fading
evergreens, sliding from pillar
to post engrossed in a passing
consequence ;

— ziggy, Jan 07, 2010

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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Brr

You are copping it, it is all over the news. Great visual write and I love the first stanza. Wonderful chilly write. Love Lyz. XX

ziggy

16 years 4 months ago

hi lyz

hello there i thought i had replyed to this , oops yes its pretty bitter ere at the mo , never to far fro the stove , cheers lyz ,,,,,,,,,,ziggy

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 4 months ago

Ahhh. In the Frosty Freeze

As Liz said, you are all over the news with your weather. Snow, beautiful and frightening at the same time, and something that seems to bring out the best in poet. "Distant hills mottled blend with an iridescent landscape" these are my favorite lines, "iridescent" in particular as that IS how it is. Delightful to read and enjoy. You present this picture as it is. I enjoyed this so much. I love snow. *smile* ~Pamela

ziggy

16 years 4 months ago

hello

hi thanks for the comment coldest here THEY reckon in fifty years who ever they are! lol....... cheers,,,,ziggy

seabhac

16 years 4 months ago

Hi Ziggy, go maith.

I do love this and I may seem a bit mean just giving you a great but there is some predicability in some of the words you have used such as flora and fauna, a bit cleche in this context.The opening lines were excellent as they hushed the reader with the image of rain becomming snow. The word crunch is the only indication that you partook in the splendour everything else reads as it may have been view from the window of a cosy warm house... Keep warm my friend Seabhac ps we had -21 on the hills here through the week I was feeling hard done to until I spoke with Mongolian friends in Ullanbaator today who are having -45...in the city....

ziggy

16 years 4 months ago

hello

hi CHEERS , ALL COMMENTS gladly taken the line you mention i also thought same but at the time of writtingm in just stuck in my head but i will return thank you ,ziggy

Candlewitch

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Ziggy

A beautiful write for the enchanted Winter wonderland before you. I hope that you are staying warm and safe from the frosty elements. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 4 months ago

hi my friend

hello thank you , the queen of the winter wonderland poetry her self it need a few tweeks but its ok for now i`ve no inspiration at all at mo the barrell is empty ,,,,,,,,cheers ,ziggy