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Lonnie
Jan 03, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Tenderness Of Teardrops

A tenderness of teardrops
has seeped into my soul
washing clean the sins I couldn't hide

Their salty softness soothing me
when I had lost control
and wished for all the world that I had died

No common water cleanses so
it must be liquid love
a rare elixir few will ever taste

Coming as it does I'm sure
from powers up above,
it is a gift no man should ever waste

The Lady who has weeped for me
and quenched my thirsting heart
will always and forever be the one

To whom I give,  in turn,  my drink,
and we shall never part
as long as Love's great stream is free to run

C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
— Lonnie, Jan 03, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Orphani

16 years 5 months ago

Very lyrical work of art

Very lyrical work of art Lon. Nicely composed in form and content.By the way will probably be in Tappahannock,VA. in a couple of weeks to hear some country music. I'm a Jersey boy. Barry ,,,o,,
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Lonnie

16 years 5 months ago

Thank you, Barry!

I don't often write love poems, but I've been much inspired lately to do so! Glad you enjoyed this one!
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 5 months ago

This caught me for the Title

This caught me for the Title Lonnie, just a few days ago I put up. "Tenderness of a tear" which actually was a FB challenge from tink. And I had fun. But reading yours was bueatiful. And you were giving Rett a hard time about being such a poetic soul. You give an occasional gruff image, then floor us with your tenderness regularly too! Great read! Julie D.D.
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Lonnie

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks, Julie!

As you know, I borrowed the title from Tink's room the other night! Glad you stopped by to read and comment, thanks again!
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poewriter58

16 years 5 months ago

Bear

Hmm I was lost in tears just now. Beautiful poem from a tender heart I agree with Julie's assement of this poem as well. But only I know you are not the person you appear to be to others( did I just blow your image lol) Love Chrys
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Lonnie

16 years 5 months ago

Thank you, Dear!

You're my inspiration, you know! These kinds of poems are usually quite difficult for me, but since I met you they seem to flow a bit better! Glad you liked it!
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

16 years 4 months ago

Dad

Sometimes the best way to help heal over things is to write, though. Glad to see it's becoming a little easier. =) ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Life is the sun, and the show must go on; make it come true. Life is the sun, and the road goes on and on; paint this song any colour but blue." - Don Ross
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Tink

16 years 5 months ago

lonnie,

I love this poem. Thanks for joining in the fun that night! Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink
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Lonnie

16 years 5 months ago

Many thanks, Tink!

I'm glad you don't mind that I used your title from chat! It fit so well with the thoughts I wanted to express, I just had to use it!
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 5 months ago

A Tenderness Of Teardrops

is that the official collective noun for teardrops? If not it should be. Love the structure, a strong, eloquent classical feel. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
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Lonnie

16 years 5 months ago

Much Obliged, Elf!

Classical-type poetry is my thing you know! And of course, Poewriter is my great inspiration! Thanks for coming by and commenting!
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Just beautiful Lonnie …

Just beautiful Lonnie ... its all been said before me ... and I offer my congratulations for spotlight ... love and hugs Jayne x x
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Lonnie

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks,Jayne!

I didn't think anyone was noticing this one much, but now I guess I've been proven wrong! Glad you think it turned out so well!
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

There’s nothing more

There's nothing more beautiful than two poets in love together... and the love poetry that emerges from that love. I've always wondered what that would feel like though I've had a small taste.. What else can I say, Lonnie and Chrys, but that you're so blessed to have found one another, and on NEOPOET, no less. :-) ~Anna p.s. Forgot to mention how bittersweet the title.
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Lonnie

16 years 5 months ago

Thank you, Anna

I'm very glad you liked this latest effort of mine! Thank you for stopping by and leaving a nice comment!
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 5 months ago

Lonnie,My Michael from

Lonnie, My Michael from Germany, was a poet, a Zen Master and 6'4".... he was also called *bear*. I suppose the Universe had other plans than what we were making, sadly. I don't think I could ever be with a man who wasn't a poet, or a poet at heart. Love is really the only thing that brings one to *life*, so to speak. ~Anna
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years 5 months ago

your poem

Couldn't agree more, very melodic and beautifully controlled. Many poo poo this so called old fashioned style of writing but only a poet with a real ear for the magic of words can create jewels like this. One caveat, it's wept not weeped, according to spellcheck weeped 'is not in the dictionary' ???
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 5 months ago

This is real good Lonnie

Excellent cadence and rhyme to this. I try and try to write this so-called "old fashioned" stuff, but I can never make it flow like this. And it always surprises me, how much meaning you pack into three-line stanzas like this in your poems. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
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anonymous1

16 years 5 months ago

I'm glad I read this

Well crafted. I like the contrast of tears and common water. I like how you expressed the value of tears. When I read it, I say wept. Thank you, Lisa
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hippiepoet69

16 years 5 months ago

I’m not going to rate

I'm not going to rate poems. I liked this one. I've wrote a lot about tears over the years. I'm glad you have a reason to write LOVE poems
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 4 months ago

Love such as this should be sung

"The Lady who has wept for me and quenched my thirsting heart" - pure poetry in words for the love of your heart. I loved the structured feel and wonderful rhyme incorporated in your verse. Love such as this should be sung, and when read aloud, this poem does just that. It simply sings a love song. Beautifully pure. ~Pamela
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 4 months ago

Tender Teardrops

Lonnie/Chrys My my have you mellowed my big bear. The influence is quite clear. Beautifully written my dear friend Tender and delicate. Men should not be afraid, Why do me let pride get in the way, of true feelings? It is not a weakness. Be human be proud wonderful Electric blue
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Lonnie

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you, Maggie!

Chrys does indeed inspire me in more ways than one! Glad you approve!
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

waters of closeness and extreme joy

Late comer that I am I like this Lonnie what touching love you spread here with the waters of closeness and extreme joy mixed with its opposite sadness where the peak of ecstasy finds it release. Lovely, and love from Ann of Norway.