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hippiepoet69
Dec 09, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

An Angel With Devil Ways

an Angel with Devil waysa heart full of Love that straysbreaking hearts as she goeslooking for, nobody knowsleaving behind a pile of broken heartsmany of them missing partssome call her a Devil when she's gonebut their all left alonewondering if that Angel was for realme,I  know cause I can feelthe comfort while under her wingI can hear the Angels sing,calling her from high abovetelling her to be careful with her Lovethat someday she will break the wrong heartone that will tear her apartshe will hear his heart beating in vainlike thunder heard over the rain

                    copyright 1983     hippiepoet69
— hippiepoet69, Dec 09, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

hey Hippie

I loved all of this the theme the execution ... its brilliant ... nicely done kind regards love Jayne
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hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Sorry!

Some how I missed your comment. I must be blind or something. Thanks for your kind comments. Take Care. huey
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Ink Dragon

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Hippiepoet,

I like the title, good use of contradictory terms there. You keep up the contradicitions throughout the first part of the poem, then abandon them in favour of a positive image later. I would therefore like to suggest splitting the poem into two stanzas. Apart from that, I also noticed a couple of minor spelling mistakes, please do correct those (e.g. l.8 their-> they're). Yours, ~Nina
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hippiepoet69

16 years 5 months ago

Thanks, you are too kind. I

Thanks, you are too kind. I didn't miss spell the word. LOL, I used the WRONG word. Ya'll gonna have some fun with this southren fried country boy. I will have to figure out where to divide it. Right after I figure out how to edit it. Thanks again Nina
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Ink Dragon

16 years 5 months ago

Edit

Hi Hippiepoet, have you figured out how to edit yet? just in case you haven't, there is a button right on top of the poem's page that says "edit". Click on it and you are there. Looking forward to the revised version. Yours, ~Nina
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 4 months ago

Angel

Hippie poet Welcome sorry i have missed you in the past. Iwent to latest works and found you. Do not give up because of others. Be true to your self my friend As for this poem I do not judge but just try and learn from others as we all express ourselves in different ways and of our life experiences This poem I can relate too so well - every word a stab in the heart where the knife turns and turns etc. I just like to let you know we are all poets here and others if they choose go their way. I am here my friend electric blue As for editing I do it on word spell check if need be and copy and paste
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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

sad

Dear H., This one could be divided into two parts if you so desired. You haven't had very good luck with love, my friend, have you? hey, we could make a song out of that, Looking for love in all the wrong places, or did somebody already do that one? Just funnin' you. I really liked this one. P.
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hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Hi!

LOL what makes you think I'm unlucky at love. Just because my poem screams it. I would love this one to be a song. This was wrote about my Black Widow. Take Care. huey