STORMS AND FLOWERS

This is good the basics are there.. Your word usage can do with a bit of twaEKING the word storm is being overused may I suggest: why does the turmoil really matter (this makes reference to the phyiscal storm and perhaps storms that brew withing) you then are touching two points and perhaps your reader will identify with either storm Thunder with lightning etc see how you feel abouth "thunder and lightning" raining down waters. perhaps cleansing waters to the beautiful earth or if you wish to use rain leave out down, as this is understood( Nice line very poetic, it can mean many things when thought about in differents contexts) Your next line is simply outstanding why does the storm really matter see how you like this line why should the turmiol or storm as you see fit really matter) For the stroms soon pass I see in this one stanza storm used three times try not to repeat your words perhaps if you said for they will soon pass ( it is understood you are talking about the storms) that storms are around let's get a little creative here lol what if you said something like In which storms will abound a little more poetic ? for a flower is soon to be found you can shorten this and still hold it's meaning for a flower will soon be found Please note these are only suggestions , do what you will with them Overall this is an excellent poem , you are sending a beautiful message here to your readers. Always a good poem can be made better. Chrys

I like your mind it dances parallel to mine along in the rain and the sun filling you with rhythms of its fall, its shine I shall take this with me and divine what I think of it, plus tard n'est pas! So long Ann of Norway

Mona I just love being out in the storm feeling the energy the thunder and lightning the power of nature unleashed is amazing. The sky lit up amazing The flowers so serene the beauty of the flowers I have written many poems on this subject This is amazing Electric Blue