HAZEY MAZE

Running dry like an unused
quill an essence that yearns
emotions untouched.

the rush coming to rest along
the comfort of living with self

the mind wandering through
stagnant pools often stepped
in without notice .

pools once a childhood
skipping faze.

Then feet with years now on
wander through the hazy
maze where memories within
formal attire rekindle an essence
yearning .

— ziggy, Dec 02, 2009

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Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Hello Ziggy

Even with the eloquent wording, your poem comes to the point. My favorite lines are: Then feet with years now on wander through the hazy maze where memories within formal attire rekindle an essence yearning . Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

helloooooo

hi there i am glad to get a comment on this i was beinging to think of scraping it as i scrapped another to improve it to this mm i`m beginning to doubt my self it seems i like the ending its hard to be original and still make sence, lol, as always cat thank you for your constant comments on my words ,,,,,,zigs

seabhac

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Ziggy

This feels different to me ....I can almost visualise you pacing with this one but somehow vocally crystal clear...crisp. Can I say of the above comment I always find your work makes sense...but original ...we all face that kick in the teeth....we are sharing emotions our ancestors have felt and spoke of for many years....but we are expressing us the core of who we are....take your Carrick Fergus poem....there are lots of people living there, maybe quite a few closet poets but you , you alone brought that poem to this site and shared your emotion, vision and dreams with a whole world of people for them you are that place you make it alive...In my book that's a gift. Seabhac

ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

helloooooo

hi there lol no pacing i just threw this one in the other day i`ll see where it goes i might come back to it in time ah cheers i`m so glad you think that of my words , i like what your saying about our ancestors , mmm that reminds me of a piece of mine called "open book " , ah the carrick on shannon poem mmmmm i thought it was a bit of a flop not many comments lol, but thank you i was trying to look up known poems on that town , having famous poets in sligo " yeats" and so on i thought i`d find at least one but none it was just for to get an idea for how to write on carrick so i decided to have a twist at it i might come back to it we will see, cheers for taking an interest and your kind comments ,,,,,,zigs

lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Awesome

Love Lyz. XX Told ya, lol.

ziggy

16 years 5 months ago

hi there

hello , thank you my dear how are you i am glad your liking this things quite on my page these days lol i have to answer your pm soon thanks yz ,,enda

doorman

16 years 5 months ago

Ziggy

A neatly paced write, with some quaint and complicated turns,- a great write. One little thing. ''the mind wandering through stagnant pools stepped in without notice '' Had an idea that actually stepping into one as the older mind wanders, would make more of a 'splash',- hence.. "pools once a childhood skipping faze.'' It's not much of a change, just a slight tweak in perspective. Good work, Espen.

ziggy

16 years 5 months ago

hi

hello espen , glad to see you about have you posted i must go see , yes i have that line there already mate i hope you got over all the festivities well chat soon ,,,,,,,ziggy