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Poetic Psychology 101

I travel roads less wandered
to lands not touched by time
where dreams are never squandered
and verses always rhyme

Singing songs of walking
my words propel my feet
down streets where Elves go stalking
and sudden strangers meet

Past the mists of morning
beyond the realm of real
I stumble without warning
on what my thoughts reveal

A universe of make-believe
where mystic creatures dance
to music that the heart conceives
by giving in to chance

Where innocence can never die
and death can never live
'tis there my soul may justify
those deeds I can't forgive

C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
— Lonnie, Nov 20, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Critiques

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ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

hi lonnie

o i am loving this lonnie what a tale and sounds so wonderful when spoken ,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you, Ziggy!

A little whimsy and a little personal truth often combine to make a half-way decent poem! Glad I had luck with this one, and glad you enjoyed it!
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poewriter58

16 years 6 months ago

Bear

When in bloody hell are you going to write something that I can find fault with. This is a workshop ya know lol. Once again you have outdone your own work.. Now you know part of the reason I stopped writing , I just cannot compare with work like yours. Love you Me Hmmm ok then this is war(I have to try to beat that!!!!!)
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Many thanks, Love!

I'm not sure I agree with your evaluation of your own work, but I very much appreciate your opinion of mine! Please, no war, though, neither of us would survive it! LOL!!!!
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

Lonnie, you are the master

Lonnie, you are the master of effortless, uncontrived cadence. I bow to your ease of walking... ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you, dear Lady!

It's genuinely a pleasure receiving such high praise from you! I'm so glad you liked this meager effort of mine!
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Lonnie

What at first seems like a simple rhyming poem ... becomes something much deeper with these words Where innocence can never die and death can never live ‘tis there my soul may justify those deeds I can’t forgive may all our souls know this place, beautifully written and I bow to your rhyme this morning ... congratualtions on spotlight love and biggest hugs Jayne x x
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you so much, Jayne!

Well, that's just me, a simple rhyming fool! I do so love the discipline of it though! Thanks for your kind words and hugs back!
Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

16 years 6 months ago

Brilliant

I love it, the verse just rolls royces along the road. again brilliant, Roscoe
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you much, Sir!

I wish they all came to me as easy as this one did! I'm very pleased that you enjoyed reading it!
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poewriter58

16 years 6 months ago

Congrats

On spotlight Tis war I say Tis war will be My words you'll keep In your memory
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Please, not war!

I doubt if I could handle such poetical ferocity as yours, M'Dear!
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Baz

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Lonnie

You say, "I appreciate moderate constructive criticism", what can I say except I hate you for being so brilliant! Just joking. Intriguing title. Baz
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you, Sir!

I placed my tongue firmly in cheek when titling this piece, but yet somehow, it almost seems appropriate! Glad you enjoyed!
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G.D.K

16 years 6 months ago

Enjoyed the whole number but

Enjoyed the whole number but my heart lies within the last verse, now that's the shit that gets me going.
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

many Thanks!

It's always nice to hear from someone new, and I'm glad you approve!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Lonnie

LOL on the title, it really tickled me. Your rhyming skills are exemplary and the pacing is excellent. I loved this poem and got caught up by the last verse. Always, Cat
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thanks, Cat!

Always great to hear kind words from you, dear lady! I'm happy this one tickled your fancy!
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 6 months ago

I danced to the rhythm through the mists of poetry,

Had to come back in for this when I saw it first in the spotlight, Lonnie. I danced to the rhythm through the mists of poetry, your dream is not squandered anyway. I like the elves and strangers in the streets, and that realm of real, chance ah yes, ah yes this was great stuff. Yours Ann of Norway
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thanks so much, Ann!

As the old saying goes, "There is more truth than Poetry" in this particular piece! A good dose of Me went into this one, as well as a little humor in the title!
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Orphani

16 years 6 months ago

This rhyming verse starts

This rhyming verse starts off rather simply and you are cought off guard as the profounder meanings start to emerge.Starting in the third stanza and ending with a deep ambiguity that pulls the whole poem into perspective on a deeper level.Well done Lon and congratulations on spotlight. Barry......o...
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you, Barry!

As it often is, with simple things, life tends to intervene and make them more complicated, and therefore, profound! Glad you enjoyed this!
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aeron

16 years 6 months ago

Wow Lonnie,

this starts out sounding like a pleasant fantasy but the last 2 lines make it truly profound. Don't get me wrong, I love fantasy, but it is too often the refuge of unaccountability, always, Aeron
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you, Aeron!

Amen to the, 'refuge of unaccountability' phrase! I too love my fantasy, but having seen more than my share of stark reality, I always try to even up the score, so to speak! Thanks for sharing your views and kind words!
Tam the Chanter

Tam the Chanter

16 years 6 months ago

rhythms

Now for all the crits; 1)"realm" would be better as "realms" 2) em , well , ok I give in... You should be really proud of this one, It's a beauty Rhythmic and rhyming, I could easily remember it Well Done Regards Ian T
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Thanks much, Ian!

Yeah, I guess I am a bit fond of this piece, as it reflects not only things I'd like to believe, but those I do as well! Glad you had a positive vibe from it!
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W.C.Wampler

16 years 6 months ago

poetic psycology poem

Lon, this poem grabbed me and kept me to the end. The last line threw me a bit, but it's your poem. An excellent write. wcw
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Lonnie

16 years 6 months ago

Many Thanks, W.C.!

It was kind of a double-edged-sword-type poem with lots of personal issues tied up in the fantasy parts! Glad you liked it!