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Cri de Ralliement (A Battle Cry)

As all light went out
I stood shaded in Grey,
hopes wings were clipped
and this heart wont obey

Suspended in life
with the drowning of fear,
putting fire in my bones
brings a power to bear

Gluing the wings
on letters and words,
I'm setting them free
to find new worlds

Sowing the plains
with peace and love,
I'm laying them out
for angels above

If reaching for stars
my legs give way,
I'll open my mind
and fly anyway

Spitting in the face
of what they say,
having nowhere to go
I wont go away

Being greedy in
the grasping of time,
it slipped through my fingers
to touch the divine

Illuminated love
reached out for me,
then gifted with eyes
I had futures to see

All Life goes on
lights are snuffed out,
death hides in shadows
of that I've no doubt

Granules of love
I've secretly hid,
dwelling in mind
with forever I'll live

A formidable foe
I have become,
with a fight to the death
My kingdom will come

— Seren, Oct 03, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Jayne

another one of your short lined masterpieces. You have the gift of words, and you always choose the right ones. Not to mention that your rhyming is always excellent. But the shadow is always there behind you, and stoically you continue on. In these lines: Gluing the wings on letters and words, setting them free to find new worlds It reminded me of making paper airplanes out of love letters. Always, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Cat

You frighten me sometimes LOL you know why? there is a verse about paper planes and i took it out because it was too long .... you really are my sister Huggles lol... thanks for the read and the comment this ones sad but its how I felt and I couldnt put it into words until Brian gave me the idea today ... thanks brian lol hug ... anyhoo thanks darlin love you Jayne x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

Battle Cry...

Screaming defience in the face of death, using my last breath to say" !#%* you, come and get me! I cannot express it any better than that. Love and the higgest bugs of all, ~ Gee P.S. Listening to Hayden's practice for 'English'
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Gee

You got it in one, I have danced round this subject for ages finally decided it was time to start trying to put my thoughts into words ... I have barely writen for the last couple of weeks ... working mainly on ones that were started and not finished lol I ahve 68 yet to finish, thanks for the huggles appreciated Much love and higgest tickling bugs lol Jayne x x x *smile* LOL :P
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Ahhhhhh Matty my Darlin'

I am so glad you liked this one ... I thought of you when I was writing it ... lol I thought matt will like this one ... And the name was inspired partly by something you said to me the other day on the verandah lol ... brian gave me the inspiration and you gave me the idea for the title ;) thanks huni (huggles) Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
T

thewholesoul

16 years 8 months ago

wow that was an excellent

wow that was an excellent read and very well written indeed. best wishes, conor
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Conor

Thank you so much for the read and the comment it is much appreciated :D and for the compliment ... WOW's are always good to get lol kind regards love Jayne x x x
ID

Ink Dragon

16 years 8 months ago

Jayne,

when your kingdom comes, may you have many more granules of love to take with you. Here's another one from ~Nina
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Nina

When my kingdom comes my granules of love are planted here and I entrust them to my friends to make sure my kids get them ;) thanks darlin(huggles) Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Jayne:

I quite like the courage to live every experience to the fullest. To accept our reality is to accept the Divine, I have no doubt about it. Great poem, I like it. Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Hugo

LOL its not courage its sheer stubborness my friend ... my docters say that I am the most stubborn person they know ... so all my life it was my curse and now ? its a blessing :) and I will be having some time away for treatment and transplants and stuff but 'I vill be back' as arnie says lol :) bigger and better and with more energy sooooo watch out ;) hahaha love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 8 months ago

You do have the gift

of words which seems to come out of a bottomless pit. Another treasure to be read. Thank you for the honor! xxxxx:)f
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

My Darling Fleur

The true honor is having you here to read my poems ... if I have a gift it was tended and helped to grow by all you beautiful people ... when I started here I wrote like a two legged dog lol ... I got four legs now but they still wobble sometimes LMAO !! he he you better be smiling !! love you huni thank you for the beautiful compliment you near made me blush Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Love u 2

I give you my breath to blow the demons away I give you my sword so you may fight each day I give you my arms so your strength is of steel I give you my soul, my heart, so that you may heal. Excellent poem you have written my dear, and I thought you might like these words. I was given them and I liked them, so now you have shared, so will I. Love and many poems more, Love from Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Ello Darlin'(hugz)

God I just read a poem it made me cry lol and now that one buggars !! hahha love ya ... its been a rough week I told Jadey and Bj today whats going on and Jadey didn't say much but that says a lot ... I am going to be away from the end of the month for a couple of months and I will still be posting but probably only once a week, but then that could change who knows I am treading in unchartered waters ... but I am taking a big stick with me ;) lol and I will be round just not so much ... you take care huni and I feel great tonight :) have been quite chipper today so its all goooooood :) Jadey helped cheer my sad ass up lol :) Love and higgest bugs from all of us Jayne x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Kal

From you thats the best compliment,thank you ... you always enthrall me with your words it was nice to repay the favour ... love and hugs Jayne x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 8 months ago

Oh oh oh! what does one say

Oh oh oh! what does one say to such a 'cri de coeur', well said Seren, serenely said and we all feel for those in need specially those who we have got to know here and whose poetry touches our hearts as yours does Jayne, this is well put and the blending of Kingdom come and defiance is good too fight the good fight, and by that I mean your fight, you have many behind you who support you and we always will. Oceans of love to you Jayne from Ann in the North sea.
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Ann

I have danced around this subject for ages and I decided to stop being a sissy about it and face it and write it ... it just felt like the right time ... I am still fighting and battling there is options ... while I have those I see it as a positive not a negative ... thanks for the comment and the wishes dearheart your an inspiration to me and not just in word but in the way you carry yourself always with dignity and grace and its always an honor to have you visit ... thank you hun love and hugs from down under Jayne x x x
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 8 months ago

Seren

Great use of short lines, it gives the read a sense of urgency. One niggle if I may: "As all light went out I stood shaded in grey" When the lights go out, it would be black, not grey?...however, that would mess up your exquisite rhyming! Great read, enjoyed every line. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear HS

I mostly use short lines, its just my way I guess lol ... the reference to grey in shadow is an old myth ... the grey of shadow is meant to be supreme ... I cannot remember the whole story its 4am and I am half asleep but there is another reason ... have you ever noticed when there is shadow sometimes there is different depths to the shadow? and thats called the grey in the shade ... something like that but my brains addled I am off to bed thanks for the read glad you liked it kind regards Jayne x x
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 8 months ago

Niggled no more

I hadn't heard of the Grey in Shadow myth...but it sounds intriguing...off to research...I feel a grey poem coming on. What are you doing on Neopoet at 4am in the morning?...I find sleep is useful, just once a day. I like it even more now. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear HS

I read it about 20 years ago ... but I know where I can find a copy of the myth ... the one I am thinking of is an australian one that was writen by a aborigine ... I know there are other myths regards shadow ... I am a fan of myth ... what am I doing up at 4am? not sleeping,I have never slept much my whole life getting four or five hours sleep a night ... every now and then I get a big sleep in ... but like hens teeth for me lol Take care kind regards Jayne
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 8 months ago

These type poems are grey,

These type poems are grey, Jayne & Kal.... Between life and life. The words, however, walk us through. For some reason I'm reminded of the Wizard of Oz...when the grey turns into living colour. Sweet dreams, my sweet daughter. I think we all take Lyz's poem and multiply it with love, ~A
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Anna

I love the wizard of OZ lol made me smile when you said that from black and white to full colour ... thats what Snake did for me I lived in a sepia world and he brought colour to my life ... I hope your dreaming sweet dreams (huggles) All my love Jayne x x x x(huggles)
Professor Purple

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

Superbe! Très évocateur!

Je suis très content que tu -- oops! Superb! Very evocative! I'm very happy that you worked on it, it gives me the chance to discover this fine poem. It flows wonderfully, and I like the ideas of never giving up, of fighting with all your strengths. It's hard to pick a favourite stanza, but I'll go with "If reaching for stars my legs give way, I’ll open my mind and fly anyway" A few missing apostrophes: "As all light went out I stood shaded in Grey, hope's wings were clipped and this heart won't obey (and perhaps a cap on Hope) (...) Spitting in the face of what they say, having nowhere to go I won't go away" You certainly don't make me want to fight you for your kingdom Antoine
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear PP

Something I dont talk about often but ... I've had leukemia since about the middle of last yr after I started here .. and i am a little aussie scrapper lol so this was a kind of way of lifting myself at the time ;) I wrote this in the middle of a bad bout of chemo last year and I still have work to do ... as you just pointed out a few things I missed lol thanks heaps so glad you liked it I am updating a few poems over the next few weeks catching up on edits sometimes I get a little behind lol big smile and thanks love JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)