jetz

Sep 17, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Cold Dreams

Cold Dreams

   Dreams of cold and darkened skies
   And sadness through and through
   Reaching back into the dark
   Finding all the hell I knew

   The hell I never speak of
   The place I do not go
   Thoughts long ago forgotten
   Oh no, it isn't so

   Explain to me the reason
   Those thoughts of long ago
   How is it now they surface
   The pain I can't let go

   How does it intermingle
   Join pain both now and then
   I thought I had forgotten
   If not now, then when

   Does the hurt last forever
   Do the tears forever flow
   Will I live forever grieving
   Over things from long ago

   Give me strength to overcome this
   Give me courage to move on
   Give me light to shed the darkness
   Teach me words to my lifes song

   Give me song birds in the morning
   Give me sun to greet the day
   Let me hear the childrens laughter
   See a smile along the way

   Let me feel that touch I need
   Someone please, to hear my call
   Without that inner closeness
   Then it means nothing at all.

Sue

— jetz, Sep 17, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: South eastern Connecticut, USA

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

hello

The rhyming and pacing are great and this piece flows well. I like the title. The content of the poem is something I can relate to very well as I have OCD and depression and was an abused child. One day I found out the key to all this pain was in being unable to forgive. It takes allot to find forgiveness within oneself, but it can be done. I started out by forgiving myself, because I had always had this deep dark feeling that everything was my fault. I hope that you find your peace someday. Your poem is very well written and deeply profound. My favorite lines are: Give me strength to overcome this Give me courage to move on Give me light to shed the darkness Teach me words to my lifes song Always, Cat

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Cat, I want to thank

Hi Cat, I want to thank you for such a nice response. It still amazes me that I carry baggage from so very long ago. One would think that after 50 years, the load would get lighter. I'm sorry that you can relate to this. In my own way, I wish no one did. I think I have at long last learned to deal with this particular issue. I wrote a poem about 2 months ago, in much more a direct way, that seems to have purged some of my demons. Thanks again for your support, and read. Sue

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

My Darlin Cat has said it so

My Darlin Cat has said it so eloquently , I echo her words ... profound and well writen bravo !! kind regards Jayne :)

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Thanks Jayne, for taking the

Thanks Jayne, for taking the time to read and reply. Everyone here has been so very kind and supportive. It is greatly appreciated. Sue

Bonitaj

16 years 8 months ago

Hello Jetz!

This is an incredibly well crafted piece. No hysteria, just a constant, gentle pleading with the universe to move on from the past - to someone, something better! I hope the writing worked some magic for your personally - because after all - that is what it is - a great catharsis! Do create some more for us! bonita j

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Bonita, Your response

Hi Bonita, Your response was so very sweet, and right on the money. A catharsis, indeed. I'm still working on the "getting over" part, but, well on the right road. Thanks again. Sue

Hooded Stranger

16 years 8 months ago

Jetz

A great piece, beautifully structured and you dropped in a chorus: Give me strength to overcome this Give me courage to move on Give me light to shed the darkness Teach me words to my lifes song Give me song birds in the morning Give me sun to greet the day Let me hear the childrens laughter See a smile along the way I can picture and feel the frustration and pain in this writing...I know you enough to know you are strong, but however strong we are, some days we are haunted by our past emotions and can't truly ever let go. As expected a tremendous piece of poetry, regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Dan, Woo hoo !!! It

Hi Dan, Woo hoo !!! It just goes to show you, if you hang out with the right people, some of them might rub off on ya. Look at me, I'm writing songs !!!!!!!!! Smile guy, that's a compliment of the highest form. I'm still not sure of this star rating thing, but pleased that this piece was so well received. I actually hesitated about posting it. Thank you for your dear words. They mean so very much. Sue

Hooded Stranger

16 years 8 months ago

Hey!

Next you'll be forming a band and wearing a hood! LOL! 'Spotlighted' I believe! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Jetz

What can I say that has not already been said above. A beautiful write shared with us from a beautiful poet. Thank you. Love from across the sea. Lyz. XX

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Lyz, Thank you so much

Hi Lyz, Thank you so much for your response. Thank you for being so supportive of my posts. I would still like to add you to my buddy list, but will not do so without your approval. Sue

Tony Udo

16 years 8 months ago

Cold Dreams

How can one person pack all that feeling into words on paper. Too bad all I can say is--Terrific!

jetz

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Tony, Thank you so

Hi Tony, Thank you so much for reading and for taking the time to respond. I hesitated on posting this piece, but, now, I'm glad I did. Your comment is greatly appreciated. Sue