Janice Pearce

Aug 27, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Hypnotized

Spun from wintry patterns,
of hypnotic silver swirls
rural roads slowly drift;
land mines in disguise.

Contest code: 083109
100 Characters [Or less]
Subject: Winter

— Janice Pearce, Aug 27, 2009

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

hugo la rosa

16 years 10 months ago

Janice

Silver swirls that get you even colder, and really hypnotizing stiff your face, hands and feet as you cross streets or turn the next corner. I feel the swift wind amidst the buildings, I guess coming from the hills. Excellent poem, short and beautiful. Best Regards, Hugo

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

Hypnotized

Hugo, Thanks for visiting my winter poem. Your comment is so appreciated~ _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Diatom Shells

16 years 10 months ago

what..

what a translation my dear. winter is a mysterious being. -diatom shells

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

Hypnotized

Appreciate your comment, Thanks for stopping by! _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

lyz

16 years 10 months ago

dear Janice

Winter is very hypnotic. Your verse put a picture in my mind. I enjoyed this winter of silver swirls, beautiful view but danger hidden by it's beauty. Title etc. to me all great.

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

Hypnotized

lyz, Glad that this brought your mind into the winter's season.I am shivering just thinking about it,but there is so much beauty too. Your feedback is always appreciated! ___________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Janice

Beautiful and enchanting. Always, Cat

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

Hypnotized

Thanks for your comment, always a pleasure Cat! ___________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

HI THERE

enda, patrick collins. fav lines . spun from wintery paterns of hypnotic silver swirls, what a great line i could almost feel the chill

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

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Ziggy, Thanks for the comment, glad it took you there!BRRRRR ____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Wafi

16 years 10 months ago

Just Wonderful, Janice!

Just wonderful,Janice!! Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

Hy[notized

Wafi, Hello there, thanks for the read and your comment. I always appreciate your thoughts~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

W.C.Wampler

16 years 10 months ago

Hypnotized...contest parameters poem

J.P., Contest parameters can be hard to work with. You did a fine job on this piece. The hypnotic beauty hiding the land mines. I've seen that, wcw

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

Hypnotized

W.C. Thanks for your support. I always appreciate your feedback and thoughts about my written words! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

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