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She Is Curl (Anni's 'almost' Sonnet)

Mere words are insufficient for this girl,
who wrote her name in rainbows on my heart
but I'm giving the poet thing a whirl,
I'm told in words lies the true poet's art.

Her wounds she turns into cradles for love,
she fills with light her deep caverns of grief.
Generous as dawn, blessing from above,
says she's a mirror and begs for belief.

She gives me to myself, never complains,
her true sky is a labyrinth of dreams.
Cloud like she floats by, so gently she rains
nourishing me 'til I burst at the seams.

Mere words are insufficient for this girl,
she is morning, moonshine and she is..curl.
— faerybeki, Aug 13, 2009

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Wafi

16 years 9 months ago

Anni

A lovely poem for a lovely lady, Beki. I liked it. “in words lies the true poet’s art.” So true Beki, you proved it here ;) Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
faerybeki

faerybeki

16 years 9 months ago

Manena Wafi, I’m happy you

Manena Wafi, I'm happy you liked it and feel I managed to capture a little of Anni's loveliness :) Always good to see you Wafi, hope you're well? I'm behind on your posts, catch up soon, much love Beki xx
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Atticus

16 years 9 months ago

Wafi said it on point, “A

Wafi said it on point, "A lovely poem for a lovely lady." Feels comforting and breezy, cool wind on a warm day, like many of us see of Anni. "Cloud like she floats by, so gently she rains" Wonderful line of the many wonderful lines. You have done a fabulous job of such a difficult task, to capture a life in words. Cheers, Nathaniel
faerybeki

faerybeki

16 years 9 months ago

Nathaniel, ‘comforting and

Nathaniel, 'comforting and breezy, cool wind on a warm day' she is like that isn't she, she has warmed me too during cold times, I'm pleased you feel the poem does her justice (it's weird, it was not my original intention to write a sonnet it just kind of happened, I was a bit worried it might read forced or constricted) good to know you feel it was done ok, thank you Nathaniel, much love Beki xx
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

for Anni

This says it all... she is really something wonderful! Nice work, Beki. Always, Cat
faerybeki

faerybeki

16 years 9 months ago

Thank you Cat, she’s a bit

Thank you Cat, she's a bit special isn't she ;) She'd say we all are but I'm much better at dishing it out than taking it lol, much love Beki xx
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Diatom Shells

16 years 9 months ago

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I like this one beki it sings on sweetness. smooth and warm like honey.-diatom shells
faerybeki

faerybeki

16 years 9 months ago

Thank you diatom shells.

Thank you diatom shells. Sweet, smooth and warm like honey eh? wow I think Anni will like that. Much love Beki xxx
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Ink Dragon

16 years 9 months ago

Beki,

what a sweet tribute to our queen of clouds! Sonnets are no small feats, I remember my first (and, to this date, only sonnet). May I point out that sonnets are supposed to be written in iambic pentametre and that you might want to reconsider the metre here? And let me add, for the sake of transparency, that I have not written another sonnet after my first one because of this metre that gave me quite a headache as I was struggling to make it work and had the feeling that it would forever remain intangible to me. Much love to you and your curly friend, ~Nina
faerybeki

faerybeki

16 years 9 months ago

Nina, I knew I could rely on

Nina, I knew I could rely on you babe. :) I've been wondering how successful it was as a sonnet, I'm so rusty on my theory hon and didn't think the stresses would fall in the right place, I just don't think I can break it down to get that right, this form is perhaps not for me either lol ;) might just alter the title slightly ;) much love to you too dear poetess, hugs Beki xx