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deep sleep

                                               Dispel your disbelief's, cling to 
                                                possibility's like corrals on a 
                                               reef, with child like imagination 
                                               re-awoken a different part of you 
                                               has spoken.
                                               
                                               Through the fountain of youth 
                                                have looked so far beyond the 
                                                truth.
                                           
                                                For I have dreams that have not 
                                                spoken but when I sleep they 
                                                have awoken.

                                                A dreamers tale that lay in wait
                                                woken from it`s sleep state,
                                                unyielding to reality our subconscious
                                                mortality.
                                   

— ziggy, Jul 15, 2009

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Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

trust the Irish

To come up with something so concise and well written Just one or two corrections... Coral (sp!) Tenses should match i.e. Dispel (present tense) & Re-awaken. Don't worry too much if it doesn't rhyme perfectly with spoken. Nice write - keep up the good work! Bonita j
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ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

hi

hi there , thanks for your kind comments , i am so glad to find a poetry site that takes such an interest. I am glad of your corrections also as i have no one i know to give me feedback, thanks again i am about to post another chat soon , ziggy, a k a, Enda patrick collins
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ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

hi

hi there thanks for your kind comments i do like your title suggestion you like cats to thats where i got my pen name from my own cat , lol cheers i have many more to post but my is computer broke, i am in internet cafe chat soon, a k a enda patrick collins
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Ziggy

I love it, all true. I love down to earth poetry.I know I will never grow up in the head but the body, boy, we wont go there. Ha. Love to awaken in my dreams too. Lyz. XX