ANOTHER ARROW TO THE HEART

and welcome to Neopoet. I liked your title, but check the spelling. your language use is excellent, it rings out very well, and your choice of words makes the meaning of the work very succinct. You rhythm and pacing are good, but you should make the last line of the first stanza into two lines to make it consistent with the rest of the poem. The theme is not one that is close to my heart; I am rather more pragmatic, or at least I like to think that I am. But this is poetry, and its all about getting your point across, and you do it well enough to engage my desire to read the piece. To me, this is the mark of a good poem: when I don't care for the subject matter but I read and enjoy it anyway, I know its good. The beginning and the ending of the poem are good, the beginning hooking my attention well, and the ending making the piece stay with me. This is a good piece of poetry, and I hope to read more of your work very soon. Again, welcome to Neopoet. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

I am going to enjoy reading you, I can tell. Four stars now fell. Will you forgive me? Craig

Loved it .. awesome work ... Love Jayne x

I don't know how I missed this one. So poignant and so accurate! Favorite lines are: Is this repititive compulsion of mine to endure - another arrow to the heart and nothing more….?” (repetitive is misspelled- probably a typo) Always, cat

I had to see how you started :) the first four lines are brilliant & EVOCATIVE & charged with such depth,i have to check my thesaurus to find more adjectives to describe this... you know that feeling you get when you read a truly awesome piece of work and it not only makes your poetic feelers tingle but it leaves you feeling breathless and pregnant with need-the need to share!!i have to share this one...even if i have to stop a stranger in the street to do it...i have to share your work...WOW!