Electric Blue

Feb 23, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Charm

Charm – in form of a person I look at you and what do I see?A serpent smile so bewitchingCaptivating that I am surelooking back at me You ooze such charm Your magnetic forceGravitates me to youI have no choice So beguiling are you
Oh you have such styleYou can charm the birdsFrom out of the trees Those eyes so blueDissolve in them I doWith lips so inviting enticingYour honey mouth so smooth With eloquence captivating
spells that you do cast.A gentleman beyond a doubtThat is for sure So self assured harmoniousPeacock shines through
A cavalier manor narcissistBut delectable too Sparkling gentilityPoetry in motionThat is you
As a lover OoooooooSensual tender and wildSo giving a Don JuanFull of passion, amourettemajestic too. You use your words and musicSo alluring your elegant styleFull of warmth so fascinatingYou’re just full of charm

— Electric Blue, Feb 23, 2009

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Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

Charm

Fellow poets I wanted to be the first to comment on the outcome of this poem. I did it in verses seen below to be read. But when submitting it the spacing has not come out as I have typed it. So I hope it does not spoil your read. verse 1 x 4 lines 2 x 4 3 x 4 4 x 4 5 x 4 6 x 4 7 x 3 8 x 5 9 x 4 Electric Blue

Ink Dragon

17 years 3 months ago

Hi Maggie,

it is a shame that the spacing did not work on this one. I think it would add a lot to this beautiful piece. Yours, ~Nina

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

Charm

Nina It took a bit of messing around but i have now got the line sequence sorted thanks Electric blue

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

Electric, i think..just

Electric, i think..just 'charm' as a title would be adequate... one can not read and not know you are speaking of a person. The poem is delightful, and sounds as if you are truly describing someone with one dynamic charismatic personality! Loved the worked! 'serpent smile so bewitching', 'magnetic force gravitates me'.., 'honey mouth so smooth', 'Peacock shines through A cavalier manor narcissist'... all little gems of thought, i could see that smile, feel that force, taste those lips.. and (the real idiosyncrasy) all wrapped in a self assured package of 'modesty' that knows! Well Done!! Tonya

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

Charm

Tonya welcome my friend I finally got the line spacing sorted. So now I hope the poem will read easily. I enjoyed creating this poem Electric blue

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

Charm

D D Thank you for commenting on my poem. I got the spacing sorted. I had fun creating this poem. Electric Blue I loved moon beams

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

the spacing did not bother

the spacing did not bother the read to me at all.. and you did very well indeed with your group of words. loved it.

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Charm...

well then... heck, I'm in love with this guy...lol... smooth write my friend of the blue persuasion... Richard

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

Charm

Richard I am glad you liked it. This is a fun poem. Electric Blue Maybe I am not so pursuasive my friend? But still very blue.

Debra Bryant

17 years 3 months ago

Hi Maggie,

Charming write...you are persuasive, whoever he is I like him too! Maybe I could benefit from the exercise you were given. Sincerely~ Debbie

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

Charm

D B I am glad you think that I am persuasive? I thought about how I feel? What would I expect? What do I actually get. I enjoyed creating this. Electric Blue

orgami

17 years 3 months ago

Fun write

Liked this one Electricblue a mix of all the whole of persona not just the illuminated good or poor qaulities but a realness feelness to this peice I dont know the mechanics of poetry like some people can play music without reading it I just fumble here But I love this one

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

Charm

Org Thank you my friend words just seem to tumble into place but bright colours dark colours and inbetween crept in too. It was fun as it unfolded in front of me and then read it when it was finished. I just smiled a smile. As for music I have always written and played by sight reading teaching myself but I am trying to play by just listening and it is not so easy. So I do not know if learning to read music is a hinderance or a help? I wish I could stream music as I do poetry. Electric Blue

orgami

17 years 3 months ago

Music

Some people here on their profile pages have music that plays and thats a treat when I visit their profiles to see whats latest for them but yes too bad we couldnt have this so we could record our own voices reading our own works I just heard Anne Sexton on U Tube the other night far from what I thought she would be She was more dramatic and got into it well I thought Just like Morrison was a poet first before the fellows got him to sing lead for them and some of his greatest songs were written by other bandmates etc I guess if we talked like on a phone one could get the idea of what I sound like Im going to get to that Reading Night at One Hundred Georges fancy jazz bar yet to see the Live poets up here in the Bay