Electric Blue

Feb 04, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

As you Slumber

A Poem inpired by Orgami

Memories are all I have.

My pen in hand no longer still words tumble onto the paper that waits

I speak from my heart and soul of when it is serene or broken.When you are in love, words tumble from our heart and soul. They freely fall.You become aware of every move soft and gentle, fragile, tender pure magicWords fallen from lips so sensual. They linger in the air Mmmmmmmmm.Every gesture tender so pure, so freely given, selfless so sensualThe world we see is a different place. Another zone, doors open I long to watch you my love as you slumber
You lay sleeping as a child in a mans body
The stress of the day drained away
shows the serenity that lies here
you gently holding me softly
through the night
I stroke your face your body you react to my touch unknowingly.You pull me to you. You cradle me in your embrace so tenderly.I watch the slightest movement your gentle smile silentlySpeaks volumes to me it melts me away Your eyes move so under closed lids dream on my love whilst you slumber.So serene this vision hidden by the mask you wear of the day.So gentle - tenderly your soul shines through blinding me soThe magic between twilight and dawn so precious timelessThe silence is broken by the dawn chorus - gently we stirFrom the magic time where we are lost to our true selves You lead me off down paths of tranquility serenityThis is the magic that dreams are made of. But this is reality too Electric blue

— Electric Blue, Feb 04, 2009

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Critiques

poewriter58

17 years 4 months ago

Maggie

It is you , you what if you were to drop the second you and say laying as a child just a suggestion The use of stuff in this case does not seem to fit the rest of the temperament of the poem what about the Fabric instead another suggestion a few well placed commas would do well here example I stroke your face, so gentle, your body, movement, closed lids, This poem is peaceful and gentle filled with warmth Chrys

Electric Blue

17 years 4 months ago

As you slumber

Hi Chrys I re read this and have made a few alterations thank you for you input Electricblue

orgami

17 years 4 months ago

soft reverance

in my time the house was safe calm only when everyone was sleeping no more fighting some nights accusations put downs sleep sleep still I stay away sometimes looking at my Bunni as she rests sleep I keep at bay peaceful their dreams seem like magic unlike mine but there is nothing like having a love to love to hold to cherish from this day forth to honour (Lori kicks my ass) but shes my princess and I her knave one day I will be a Knight maybe in the next life catch yah on the flipside

Electric Blue

17 years 4 months ago

As you slumber

Steve or Big O To the king of my heart as he slumbers This is a time I treasure the most. A time to share to be so close To be held in his loving embrace looking at my truelove's face This time not measured by the clock he is sturdy as a rock To feel him breathing on me oh how so safe do I feel as his heartbeats gentley so steady my man of steel His radiance, the Aurora Borealis cannot compare My love is himself a cosmic event He makes me feel so content Here is the only place I long to be for all eternity He is my King and I want to be his queen He is my knight tall dark leather clad With a heart full of light and fight oh to my delight All I have is my heart so true to give to you My body and soul you already own. You have music in your soul You are poetry in motion You have my devotion Electric blue

Electric Blue

17 years 4 months ago

As you slumber

Org Your new picture is growing on me I am seeing the spirit within The way you weave your words the pictures i see you do inspire me so my friend Electricblue

Ink Dragon

17 years 4 months ago

Maggie,

I am so glad for you that you have found your words again. You seem to be growing stronger and stronger as a poet. This poem is image-evoking and full of strong feelings. Yours, ~Nina P.S. l.10 mistyping of "serenity"?

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

As you slumber

Nina Thank you for your kind comments. Words are tumbling around dreams and memories haunt me so and I just long to be back where I am alive and happy. If only I had a magic wand. Electric blue

Ink Dragon

17 years 3 months ago

Maggie,

if I had a magic wand, I´d lend it to you! Yours, Nina

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

As you Slumber

Nina You can send it by UPS or Fed-Ex I will pay for it! many thanks Electric blue

Lonnie

17 years 4 months ago

Very Nice, Maggie!

If anyone here on Neopoet can inspire others, surely it is Orgami, and your poem here shows just how much inspiration he can be! Well done, my friend!

Electric Blue

17 years 4 months ago

As you slumber

Lonnie You too inspire me so. Read my poem World beyond my dreams it is in response to your poem. As I was reading it my poem took form.. As I read your poem words started to tumble from my pen onto the paper that waits. Thank you for you comments my friend. Electricblue

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

As you Slumber

Janice Oh yes I dream of this over and over. But the dreams I dream are reality too. But I long for them over and over. To feel the feelings the emotions again wondering If I ever will know what it will feel like to be alive like this again. But to me this is more then beautiful. Thank you for reading my poem Electric blue

Debra Bryant

17 years 3 months ago

Blue,

My "Simple Pleasures" is a very dim comparison to the sentiments expressed in your poem. I am as always, inspired by the talent I see every time I visit this site! Sincerely~ Debbie

Electric Blue

17 years 3 months ago

As you slumber

Debbie Thank you for your comments and sad you are weighed down by such sorrow. Like you I am inspired by many others on this site and silly me when I try to comment - my comment turns into a poem which I cannot help. I do love you picture and as an artist it draws me to it. I will have to do this portrait i see. Natures orchestra. Yes I could of gone through all of the instruments but just picked a few etc. Electric blue