Left Overs Hunger

These pangs of hunger are not from my belly
They come straight from my heart
They aren't for dainty cookies or Barbecue
Parts of delicious flame broiled animals

I require sustenance's it's true but,
I Shan't eat again until you
Are once again upon my plate

Wet my lips and dance upon my tongue
With kisses made of you
My soul it has decided it

I must prevail and I will
Starve my flesh to death
For flesh requires flesh
Made from dirt or ash, it was not designed to last

It can not stand the test of time
So I must dine upon your smile
Must taste your lips divine

Consume your eyes
How they sparkle
More tastier then fruity wine

But, still drunken, my soul
Because of your beauty
You are my buffet

An endless feast of miracles
That will never ever decay
My soul has no Belly

So it can't be filled
With just this one meal
Left-over by you

A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Jan 07, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

Critiques

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

This is good

although this metaphor is used a lot, I like your interpretation of it very much. The only suggestion I can make is that, in the fourth verse, you drop the word "will" from the first line. I think this would make the line flow better, and place it in the immediacy of the present. Respectfully, Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

Better

yes, now the 4th verse works much better. I love the third verse, by the way. The unspoken urgency and eagerness for her is wonderful. Respectfully, Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks for pointing that out I broke the line and forgot

the "I" as I meant to make a statment as I will, Still bringing this together some I work at the Libray on these things because my computer is on a freaking Holiday. But, I jot them down, and then try to read and coment on others works too only get 240 min each day but, I can be bump at any time after the first hour, if someone else needs to use these computers. This berry is still new and everyone and their brother wants to use them because of the recent flooding and the work loss in the area, plus the schools are having parent teacher conferances now so the kids have half days all this month. Donnie / Sibad thanks for reading

poewriter58

17 years 5 months ago

donnie

the last line seems to falter a bit. Love the third stanza Yes it is a very used metaphor but you have channeled it to your needs Nice writing Chrys

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 5 months ago

Hey Chrys Did you read the up dates I been putting on

Fire Drake,Down at Devil"S" Lake and some others, I got to get home Someone picking me up for leagues tonight at 6:00 Bye

themoonman

17 years 5 months ago

Sinbad...

for an overused metaphor... you owned it the way you wrote it. enjoyed the read... Richard

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks Richard I been trying to

Own something I guess this will do for now but, I think poems never truly belong to their maker. A lack of what I don't know yet, confidence maybe. Donnie/Sinbad Thanks for reading