Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Glad to see this one again. Maybe have a closer look again at the last line (she comes?). Love, Ink

thank you for posting this magical piece... quite the beauty it is... Richard

Loved this one - such a graceful, delicate write that my mind almost skipped over the meaning of verse 3! Looking forward to reading more of your posts. Regards, Jo

I like this it rhymes really well Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Sorry, but I couldn't understand this. Would it be possible to make the meaning clearer without losing the rhyme and rhythm? But don't worry about my opinion much, because other readers seem to have understood well enough... Best wishes, Robert.

Beautiful symbolism! Your writing is quite tender in a way despite its subject matter. Great flow with the rhyme & repitition and images so vivid. Not easy! Nice job Proprietress ~Stella

"she turns them into navy-blue," I'm not clear on what the them references. I could speculate, but I'd rather not. So impressed I am that you dribble words like liquid gold across a page of roughened life. Sparseness makes rich. Smoothness blends to pudding chocolate. I esp. like your command of the (English) language ... and of course the way you splash it about. Childlike, I relish getting my stockinged feet wet and smeary in your poetic mud puddles. You plant treasures both obvious and hidden. Kudos, Chuck

A lovely piece, written where saddness prevailed, and the way that an ache, is transposed to a beautiful entity. Lovely. Fear not to feel again, as the lady will lose her strength as you grow stronger. Then the heart once again will beat with loves glow. Yours, Ian.T

This is Glorious! Bravo Propriestess, your rhyming verse is exceptional. M

Very good read with good rhyming and rhythm. I liked it very much. Sincerely; Debbie

I must say I love your writing style. So elegant and peaceful, yes loud and emotional. This is a wonderful work of art. Well done!

I can't get enough of this! It's a shorter poem, but that's what makes it so fantastic! An excellent poem!

a beautifully written piece. Thank you for posting.

And a well deserved Spotlight! Congratulations! Loved it. Respectfully, Rett: "Each man is good in the sight of the Great Spirit.." (Sitting Bull)

Respectfully Yours, Barbara

"tarnished in this snowflake term" poems speaks in my heart feel its echo on the woods of my soul the velvet paw of wolves await !

this is the level of poetry that keeps me coming back here, generous gems delivered gently, creating a hazard to bare feet and souls. congrats on well deserved spotlight. cheers, Jess "They that give up essential liberty to obtain a little temporary safety deserve neither liberty nor safety" Benjamin Franklin.

Of course I'm biased a bit because I love using Rhyme and Meter myself! I believe this is the first of yours i have read and I must say that I hope it is not the last! I see you are from Germany, and I thought I would mention that I have been there and loved all the parts of it I saw! Was there in 1965-66! Kudos for Spotlight!

Spotlight... well deserved... amen... A poem is born of the poet... her symbols and stories... few can understand all of them.. fewer can feel them in their soul... that's what poetry is...music for the soul. this one is soothing in its mercy. ~A "Speech is blasphemy. Silence a lie. Above speech and silence is a way out." I-tuan.

Poems like yours lights up the star in my heart. It tis a true inspiration to me. Please never lose this talent. I hope to see more of this type of poetry from you or just hear from you. Pixee

It is ever so unfortunate that proprietress of crimson hearts cannot read all your nice comments here at the moment. She will only return to the site next week, as far as I know. But I do think she will hugely appreciate your feedback. Have great holidays, everyone! Ink

I agree with the sentiment behind the poem more than anything. I thinks it's really amazing to personify the pain of heartache like that. I think you did it well.

Welcome to Neopoet "land of the freed poets" love is so wonderful until it destroys all that we thought it was! The power of this stanza, show the monster that is born from loss: "behold such graceful way to kill she eats them raw when pounding still devours what the world did take to soothe her caustic, burning ache" this poem is magnificent, but maybe I'm bias because I love dark poetry. I see that you have read Paulo Coelho. My favorite is: "Veronica decide to die", Because the young man in the story is the writer himself, and also the point that is made by the story of the king drinking from the well of madness. I have also spend time in Germany in the 70's, Bad Tolz, and Kirchgoens. thanks, Eddie

proprietress of crimson hearts she comes around when love departs these lines cap the poem. a decent love poem

Apart from the "navy blue" that strangely made me stop and feel a little ordinary, I loved your use of words, as someone said in this long screed of comments. Yes words should be like individual diamonds, or grey stones surprising us in fits and starts like life's most beautiful, and sad experiences, this is what gives your poem its sparkle. Even though they do not all spell out their meanings in the mundane manner of everyday language, something some people on this Noepoet site seem to require? That's the ART of poetry to say just enough and awake the reaction of the reader, surprise him into seeing yet again the wonders that can be seen-unseen. Don't you think, now I have your whole name Proprietress of Crimson hearts from just Ann

that doesn't feel like poetry, it transcends it. So many people try to make the A - A B - B format work and fail horrendously. You not only make it work, you tie a velvet rope around it and make it your own. Your words are so musical they're almost hypnotic. My only real qualm is line two of stanza three jars a bit at the end with "when pounding still" instead of "when standing still." Now mind you, that might be your artistic license and my predjudice in what I'd put in the line, so don't pay so much attention to everything I say, lol! Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible

This is very dramatic, I like your verbage and flow! Reminds me somewhat of my own style, but done better, :) Two suggestions though, on the "behold such graceful way to kill," I don't know if you care, but it's not grammatically correct, if you do care, you could swap "such", for "this", behold THIS graceful way to kill. Also, "devours what the world did take", sounds a bit archaic, and it doesn't make sense to me, at it's most basic, if the world already took it, how could she devour it? (Don't laugh, best way I could describe it) I don't know if you wanted it that way or not, but my suggestion is to change the word "did", to "would", thereby spelling out that she got there first, :). Otherwise, to me, a perfect piece, thank you! Brian

Kata I read your words often and just love your picture too. Deep purple haze to me is mystical a beautiful aurora my friend. Come be my Crimson Angel. To devour those who trample upon and steal and break hearts. I love the third stanza the best. I am an angel with one wing Come visit me Oh ye of Crimson Heart. I just love the way you weave you mystical words of enchantment. Electricblue

and I just finished reading this for what, the fifth time? Sixth now. Think I'm finally getting my head wrapped around this one. Awesome write. very deceptively detached and peaceful. The last line - very powerful. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

Hello... This is a special one because one can relate to the essence of the poem by looking at the poetess’s picture…. Visually and rhythmically sound. Priya