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~beatification
before me, there were trees
rocks and rain
and stars
with the passing of time
I have learned
to tie my days with the red thread
of sunrise
to dip my fingers in spring-cold water
of wisdom
to watch as warm wind visits
my window
outside my pane
a hundred smiles
are born from the strength
of just one vine
this life is
too brief a journey
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Free verse
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Comments
Eduardo Cruz
Mon, 2011-08-15 12:56
Wow!
This is Taoism at its best!
a combination of a written out Haiku.
I love the way you structure this. the meter builds in a soft but strong way.
excellent!!
Eddie
PS i am a Taoist.
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Candlewitch
Wed, 2011-08-24 18:16
Hello,
there are beautiful thoughts and sentiments here. Life lessons if one reads carefully! Very well done!!!
always, Cat
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