Breakfast Sandwiches has been selected for pulication @ Triond.com

Breakfast Sandwiches
Has been selected for publication @ Triond.com

http://authspot.com/poetry/breakfast-sandwiches/

A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Feb 06, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

Critiques

Kieran Nelson

18 years 4 months ago

I think the poem needs to be

I think the poem needs to be condensed and brought together as I was losing interest halfway through. Kieran "Mind, how you go!" - Roger McGough's poem for LSD Awareness Week

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 4 months ago

Most of my works are rather lenghty but they tell stories

And I am still learning the art of condensing and still being able to tell the story or bring the pitcure in to veiw Thanks for the commit I am working on shorting my writings will take me some time for I still have no computer at home Donnie / Sinbad

poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago

I see

What you were trying to say and do with this poem and did not quite bring it off a little fine tuning will do it good. Take each line read it out loud ( seems silly but works every time) see which lines you can combine see which you really do not need I'd like to see a rework of this one The title is what pulled me in I wondered what could someone write about a breakfast sandwich good hook Chrys