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Like the Tin Man

A former model citizen, I no longer posse the heart

To pump these tired limbs, now just rusting away in the pool of fools

From all these tears but, not those of sadness, or of joy but, because of Joy

She left for good this time, I can only hope
 
I was a golden Knight, in high polished armor

Now just a  shell rusting away 

A man with golden locks is, now simply bald

The shinning funnel, that onced filled me up it is now flipped

It's a rusty, oily funnel placed upon my head, for a hat

All our memories flushing out of, the tip top bottom end of it

Steaming and smoking, and circling about my head

No Axe, do I hold in my right hand, for no wheel do I have for to grind

In my left hand hold I, the oil can now emptied it of it's last drop

Soon I will no longer be able to twist and shout or even speak

For the magistrates is lurking about

Waiting to turn me out, and grind me up

Least by some chance I be saved, from the pending scrap heap

By some fair maid, O' tender lady, please splash me with some thirty weight ten 

On these old rusted joints spread some warm lube

Let lose this here Knight; let's, let the night lose

Let me stay, sing, and dance about, here with you again

Let me love once more, least that old witch water me down for sure

 

A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Jan 16, 2008

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Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

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Kieran Nelson

18 years 4 months ago

Liked.

Liked much, especially the overriding theme of the wizard of Oz. The only part I wasn't sure of was the 4th last line "Let lose this here Knight; let’s let the night lose" I like repetition, and se it myself, but I didn't really see how it helped the theme of the poem, i.e talking of love and wanting all the way through and then at the end wanting to go out and party. I know what you were going for, but I don't think it worked, not for me anyway. Other than that I like it, nice one! Kieran PS: Question, is it just coincidence that both the poems you submitted today have a mechanical theme, or is it something your into just now?
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Sinbadthesailorman

15 years 11 months ago

Just a coincidence

I am trying to get as much of my work into the site for, I may be moving sooner then I wish too and my computer at home has died on me. I've a friend coming over tonight and scared it will have to be wiped. I've so much work, not yet committed to hard copy, I will go mad to try and recall all that was created and in such a short time. Thanks for the read Donnie/Sinbad