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CryingPagan89
Aug 21, 2007 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Illusions

Mirrors on the walls,
Mirrors are the walls,
You see your self,
You look,
But can you really truly see?
Do you see what I do?
The beauty of your being?
The kindness of your heart?
No…you don’t.
All you see is the wrong you’ve done
The people you’ve hurt,
The ugliness of yourself.
You don’t see what I see,
When I look at you,
You don’t see the wonderful person,
Who can’t tell how truly extraordinary they are.

— CryingPagan89, Aug 21, 2007
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Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 7 months ago

I see great potential here

With some restructing and fliping of you sentences I am dead tired but here it goes Mirrors on the walls Mirrors on the walls find another word e.g. Halls as in down the halls of time You’re self you see You look you could add at me Can you truly see? You do see what I do? The beauty of your being? The kindness of your heart No…you don’t. reverse Maybe. Don’t you? No All you see is the wrong you’ve done change you’ve to I’ve And so on I see things backwards some times so they sound and appear different to me so this may or may not work for you Donnie/Sinbad

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