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Stillborn
no whimper, no breath
untethered soul, hushed and still
in my arms, silence
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Structured: Eastern
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In 1980, after a full-term pregnancy, I had a stillbirth. This poem has lingered on my fingertips ever since, and I've never shown it to anyone before. Finally thought it was safe here and it was the time to let it fly...
L
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Comments
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-07-26 18:13
Beautiful
And heart breaking in the same breath. A very emotive and courageous write. Thank you for sharing this part of your life with us.
~RoseBlack~
Lavender
Thu, 2023-07-27 09:19
Hello, Carrie,
A significant moment...
Thank you so much for your tender thoughts!
L
Ruby Lord
Wed, 2023-07-26 18:31
Heartfelt, anguish, trauma,
Heartfelt, anguish, trauma, memory. You hit home. Ruby :( xxx
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
Lavender
Thu, 2023-07-27 09:22
Hello, Ruby,
A poem that longed for a home.
Thank you, as always, my friend!
L
leoferaco
Sun, 2023-07-30 22:11
stillborn
Hi Lavender,
This was so simple yet so touching. A great reminder that poetry doesn't need to be writen longform to convey intense emotion. You've expressed so much so beautifully in a concise way. I really like this, thank you
Lavender
Mon, 2023-07-31 13:20
Hi, Leo,
Not certain why, after more than 42 years, this poem came to light of day...but so be it. I'm very happy if it touched you in any way. Thank you for reading!
L
paul Bartoswicz
Thu, 2023-08-10 15:33
Thought provoking
My Wife had a miscarriage in the 80's. I wrote a Piece LOST about it. It sent her into a deep depression, and unbeknownst to me put us in a deep financial hole that took me decades to dig out of. It can be very damaging to the psyche, as it was on me as well. I still think about that event often
Lavender
Thu, 2023-08-10 20:39
Hello, Paul,
I'm so sorry to hear about that. There is a special place in our hearts for children that we never had the pleasure to know better, yet somehow we know them all the same. Poetry helps. Took a long time for this poem to see light. I'm glad you wrote about your child, also. Would love to read it if you ever feel comfortable sharing. Absolutely no pressure. Again, my condolences.
L
Lavender
Fri, 2023-08-11 22:38
Hello, Max,
Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts.
I always appreciate your time!
L