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Good to Bad`
Do you ever feel like your getting bad again?
You've stopped doing what your supposed to
Don't get me wrong, your getting up, going to work
But it starts slow, you stop putting on lip gloss
You stop brushing your teeth, then your hair
Your clothing starts to become a little less put together
No one comments, they don't want to impose
You know whats happening but make excuses
It's cold out, its raining, your not feeling 100%
Except the excuses go from once a week to everyday
Your home gets a little more dirty, the dust gets thicker
You spend more and more time away
Away from people, passions, places you loved
Away from your thoughts, away from reality
You start to hide, in sleep, in your subconscious
Now that you have realized this is whats been happening
Now that there is a tangible reason behind the slide downward
How do you stop it? The answer is exactly how it began
Go backwards up the slide, slowly now its not easy
You start with a shower, it burns away the dread
Then maybe a deep breath to remind your lungs your alive
Take off the too big pajama pants you stole from your partner
Remove the 15 year old T-shirt with stains and holes
Put on something that makes you feel....anything
Now its starting, the sensation of life coming back into your veins
You take it slowly, building the effort from one day to everyday
Again they start to notice again, only this time they smile
Once again your up and off to work, only this time
Your getting good again.
Comments
Hannah Moonlark
Tue, 2020-06-23 23:05
Hello
Welcome to Noepoet.
Nice poem. I like the happy ending,
Maybe on the line "Go backwards up the slide, slowly now its not easy"
you should put a comma like this: "slowly now, it's not easy" But I don't know.
Geezer
Wed, 2020-06-24 07:29
Hello...
I see you are new to Neo. and this is the first poem that you have posted. Very nice and good advice. I think that maybe you might use [you're] instead of [your] and you could drop the [that] in the line: "Now, [that] there is a tangible... not a major thing, but it sounds better. Your partner is right to suggest that you get a bit out of your comfort zone. it opens your mind and helps you get to places you've never been. Glad to have you here at Neopoet. Make sure that you read and comment on the other writers here and you will get good feedback and critique on your own work, that will help you throughout your own writing experience. ~ Geezer.
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