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A Hot Photon
Member since July 10, 2026
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if he was an architect like his dad
he thought, he would redesign his room
thicker walls to keep the loud voice out
a blueprint for how to uncurl his fists
a pencil tucked behind his little ear
instead of a gun tucked in his belt
he would construct a better husband
for his mother in her room.
if he was a coach like the adult
whose cruel words about his weight
weighed on him like medicine balls
he would only blow the whistle
when he needed to, and stop
to tie another child’s shoes
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and let his kindness run
continuous like a treadmill.
if he was a pianist like his brother
with scholarships handed to him like
macarons on a tray, he would
stay away from the sharps and flats
and treat the wood like glass
an octave rising without ever
raising his delicate voice.
if he was a pilot like his stepdad
he would travel up his roof, quietly
like the bubbles he would blow
watching his stepdad blow smoke
out of a marlboro in the same
balcony, no warmth in that radar
but the kid knows his skies would
be less turbulent.
if he was a ‘man’ like the others,
he would shed their skin
to find the real man within.
A Hot Photon’s timeline
- July 2026
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15 WedCritiqued
"frayed with disuse" by @crypticbard
"I like the rhymes you chose, and how you made them work with your imagery." -
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14 Tue
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11 Sat
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11 SatCritiqued
"Joy in the passing" by @lykkeligere
"So did I! I still do too. Everything in my room is space-themed and I would listen to hour-long Carl Sagan vids" -
11 SatCritiqued
"Joy in the passing" by @lykkeligere
"So did I! I still do too. Everything in my room is space-themed and I would listen to hour-long Carl Sagan vids" -
11 Sat
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11 SatCritiqued
"Joy in the passing" by @lykkeligere
"Wow, what a theme to focus on! Especially the last few lines, they really resonated with me. You have a handle on imagery. Love it. Maybe it can be smoothed over by handling line breaks better so some ideas can better g…" -
11 SatFirst critique offered
on "Joy in the passing" by @lykkeligere
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10 FriNew follower
@A Hot Photon
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10 FriFirst publication
The pilot’s superposition
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10 FriJoined Neopoet
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About Me
About me
Any pronouns. I am a young poet looking for a community. Enjoy both free verse and strict iambic meters.
Favorite line in any poem:
“Why do you weep, Asterie? For Gyges, whom west winds will bring back to you at the beginning of spring.” - Horace
Location: USA
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