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Choices
I choose light
Though I’ll walk through darkness to attain it
I choose hope
For it carries the tired and wearisome heart
I choose love
Because all else is displaced energy
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Free verse
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Comments
Lavender
Wed, 2022-10-19 22:10
Choices
Hi, Tim.
Wise words, great affirmations, but mostly - the best way to live a life of value and quality. In reading, I seem to naturally change the word "the" to "my" - "For it carries my tired and wearisome heart."
Strong finishing last line and thought.
Thank you!
L
Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-10-20 06:05
I’m going to think
About that little change you suggested. I want to say hope carries everyone’s hearts. Now maybe I don’t. Maybe “Hope carries a tired and wearisome heart.” Realistically for the purpose of verb tense you are correct I believe
Thanks for your continued support
Tim