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When Love Comes
When love comes you see its face,
Through the eyes you want to race,
We come together to love each other,
Like your kids or your mother,
Don't lose faith in what you have,
Things will happen good or bad,
for love we fight to stay together,
never leave now and forever.
Review Request (Intensity):
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2022-08-15 07:06
Very good
Welcome. Excellent job. It’s structured well, good rhyme. The title is fitting. At first I was going to suggest a change because it’s the opening line but I actually think it’s probably perfect.
Look forward to reading more,
Tim
Jackweb
Mon, 2022-08-15 12:50
Welcome aboard!
This sounds beautiful! I liked the simplicity of the poem. An informative piece indeed! The begining and final cadence was excellent.
You posted this same poem twice. Can still delete one.
Beautifully crafted!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb