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Hey Whistle at 5.15 A.M. JUN CONTEST FINAL ONE
In a place I knew
a village
with maximum population
the train whistled at 5.25 am
It was too early to rise
too late to go back to sleep
what did then couples do
but not enjoy
together they made up
for the balance time
till all village girls
became pregnant
wow what a climb
the Mayor then passed
a verbal Order
no whistling by the train
through the village
let young one's
in juxtaposition remain
lol
as the train now silently
passed their open door
the driver still whistled
for sure
they couldn't see
nor hear any more
the train just silently passed
the driver happy galore
not knowing
what may have happened
he did everyone ignore...
laying drunk on the tracks
still moving for sure
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
just for fun
mixed with added pun
now say well done
still 15 won
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
scribbler
Thu, 2020-06-04 14:18
Hi loved
Hmmm... "died much and many more" sounds a bit forced but the poem and its premise are entertaining....A town slowly depopulated by the lack of a whistle
c lynn brooks
Thu, 2020-06-04 17:09
loved
what a augh I had at this poem thank you for that I'm still laughing
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lovedly
Thu, 2020-06-04 21:42
Thanks
Lynn
what an astounding comment
Even stan liked it t
hanks to you
2
lovedly
Sat, 2020-06-06 00:21
great
is it fit for Jun humour contest
Please see and say
Thanks Teddy 15
lovedly
Sat, 2020-06-06 03:21
if you are
trying fo a HAT trick
I shall let you
WIN
LOL
I am funny no
but shall compose
life is nothing else
but bottled up fun
like a Soda and rum
may begin for some
but I love SCOTCH
it only kicks
when taken on the rocks
it gives a kick
no manly horse can
so many standing besides me
run they say
mad man
seeking only fun
Sad he is now a horse
but be happy
an old one
HOZ IT
15
lovedly
Sat, 2020-06-06 05:26
ok shall try again
this obviously failed
15
Rula
Mon, 2020-06-08 17:07
Well done
indeed Lovely!
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lovedly
Tue, 2020-06-09 00:10
ok Rula
Thanks waiting for more views and suggestions
rgds