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Equalizer Nature...edit
Equalizer Nature
When one is born
is
NUDE
when one is torn
is made
NUDE
but the fact of life
is not to be
CRUDE
When we leave the
Earth
we all are same
uncovered
like at
Birth
Nude
So leave an everlasting while
inevitable print
just one of smile
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Rula
Sun, 2020-04-12 11:44
Loved
If we leave that line before the last, we could get a more universal read
So leave an everlasting while
inevitable print
just one of SMILE
(like Loved does)
ALL THE WHILE
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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lovedly
Sun, 2020-04-12 13:33
Thanks Rula
your are always apt
thanks done
Geezer
Sun, 2020-04-12 11:54
I guess...
that is one way to say that as we come into this world bereft of clothes and naked, we should go out the same way; wearing nothing but a smile. ~ Geezer.
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c lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-04-12 16:03
lovedly
I would use the word nude one more time after--- uncovered like at birth
there is something oddly eerie about this poem I like it very much
Chrys
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