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Desperation Doubling
everything has its way of crying out
for attention
and need often has the most
ingenious expressions
like the vibrant coloring of flowers
attracts bees to pollen
we, too, rely on design and fashion
like hungry kittens
we sing our arias
and then crave and market
mass euphoria
every modern endeavor
finds it genesis in nature
but will our ambition
make us a non-sustainable sort of creature?
the gift of desperation
may also be our downfall
what other species in the world
have to worry so much
about impulse control?
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Comments
raj
Sun, 2018-07-22 04:51
good message here about not
good message here about not being impulsive and getting carried away by the physical appearance...at lest that's what I read ..don't know if that was your intent...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Tue, 2018-07-24 22:09
u say it all
everything has its way of crying out
for ''''attention''
and
need
DESIRE>>>>>{ PERHAPS WOULD BE BETTER HERE (do hear) }
often has the most
ingenious expressions
u r @ wonder poet
great compo Greg
all will love itttttt