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My lost Darling STILL TIS JULY
My lost Darling JULY CONTEST
I am still in school of thoughts
When to pull up my socks
when will she look at me?
when will I do what
perhaps a kiss
but the fatso there
alone at me does stare
how to avoid the black horn one
I am scared
so I leave the school from the back door
all are unaware
till I see another guy
kiss the one
for whom I my whole life
would lay bare
But alas he too
damn does care
Who is she to me
Oh my Delaware!
of that rascal be aware
I wanted a virgin in you my
Sweety for you I did care!
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
this is for July contest
your software needs to take care
nothing beyond May They say
DearStan
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Comments
Barbara Writes
Mon, 2015-07-27 13:21
Nicely written lovedly
I like the scene here differently rings back to school. the crush that never recognized you.
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lovedly
Mon, 2015-07-27 21:45
yeah she ran after a guy with a car
learned she married him
to be widowed early
sad but its destiny
she doesn't yet know
I am alive
but not in waiting!
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2015-07-28 04:28
Lol
Lovely descripu
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lovedly
Tue, 2015-07-28 06:12
thanks barbara
again thank you
Sparrow
Tue, 2015-07-28 14:22
Loved
July contest should have been in the title but not to worry I see you are too deep in grief to need me to correct you..
There will be another one day lol,
If I could get clearance for one of my Harem, through your picky customs, I would have sent a couple to you, do take care,
Yours Ian.
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lovedly
Tue, 2015-07-28 15:12
I had reposted
as JULY as per Stan stand
now as per you I will add
Julie here too
OKAY ADDED SEE IT!
herz
Sparrow
Tue, 2015-07-28 18:47
Damn
Come Saturday I will make you change your mind about July, La, La, Sparrow..
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lovedly
Wed, 2015-07-29 15:42
la la la laaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
ha ha ha haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
the ''' ides '''of July have come
and about to go
one day more
and u could still shoot
if u wish so
or spare me a new life
if you can do so
Sparrow
Wed, 2015-07-29 18:29
Loved
Each month has a period called the ''' ides ''' the reason March is so prominent is because that was the month JC was alased by Brutus, lol.
So you beware the next ones, ''' ides '''of Augustus..
He, He, and Digit may come visit you all again, Yours J Sparrow
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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
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lovedly
Wed, 2015-07-29 23:43
yeps my ides came yesterday
and by ur good wishes
were washed away
so on Neopoet
now I still continue to stay