chrisbyrne

Member since January 2, 2011

Member for 15 years, 5 months

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Small moves

Posted Mar 31, 2010 · 12 lines · 5 critiques

Breath slow. move in time.
In. Out, so hard to trace.
Love the change, mind. No place!

I am me, you can see.
Want, lust, need.
I exist in breath outside space.

Move in time, all is well.
Cold fact can shape;
All the forms to come.

I love life, time indeed.
need, forfill, centre. See.
Flowing out, I am me!

chrisbyrne’s timeline

January 2026
02 Fri

Anniversary
15 years of membership
January 2021
02 Sat

Anniversary
10 years of membership
January 2016
02 Sat

Anniversary
5 years of membership
January 2012
02 Mon

Anniversary
One year of membership
January 2011
02 Sun

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
April 2010
20 Tue

Received a critique
on Small moves from @Electric Blue
"Chris Well this is me also, think alike. But i feel on the outside looking in again longing to be part of something - someone. Yes I am me - but what is me? Electric Blue"
01 Thu

Received a critique
on Small moves from @Draki
"I like this straight away for it's simplicity and compactness. It's just about being, or at least a being's experience of being! I didn't realise until after a few reads that you were meant to be conveying the essence o…"
March 2010
31 Wed

Received a critique
on Small moves from @raskin
"Yes, I am me. Raskin"
31 Wed

Posted a poem
Small moves
"Breath slow. move in time."
Open thread 12 lines
February 2010
10 Wed

Received a critique
on love song for the lost from @Electric Blue
"Chris You tore at my heart with this. It was raw but boy do I know how this feels too. My moment in time last forever and a day. Our hearts connected by that invisible chord. Eternal muse always. One glance I too pray t…"
January 2010
27 Wed

Received a critique
on Once upon a time from @magics02
"Chris I missed you on here and just want to say this poem is supberb in its meaning, its words and all that is felt. Kudos young man and keep up the writing. Hope all is good for you now. Love Friend Mona"
27 Wed

Received a critique
on Once upon a time from @weirdelf
"One in a poem has to be handled well. the rest is trying too hard to be portentous. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible"
11 Mon

Received a critique
on love song for the lost from @docmaverick
"..."love" is a difficult topic, and you handled it well enough. Thanks for commenting on my first Blog. I will be checking YOUR posts, as well. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick."
10 Sun

Critiqued
"FLUSHED~~~~" by @lyz
"To get humour in poetry is a hard task, you have done it! I laughed out loud and am still grinning. Well done Chris"
08 Fri

Posted a poem
love song for the lost
"Just a moment, in time or breath."
Open thread 24 lines
07 Thu

Critiqued
"Mind bruised by thoughtful fists. part four" by @Lunegirl
"There were some amazing points in your write where the unimportant things become so big! the mess in the kitchen, the shade of the rad! I thought that was moving! You capture the helplessness of a totally sureal and hor…"
07 Thu

Posted a poem
Once upon a time
"A distant star, unreachable desire."
Open thread 17 lines
04 Mon

Received a critique
on War! from @violet
"a very powerful message... raw and written beautifully thankyou for saying what most only think! :)"
03 Sun

Posted a poem
2am
"It's 2am, where I am,"
Open thread 20 lines
02 Sat

Critiqued
"Restraint(edit)" by @Seren
"There is a skill to keeping this subject out of the morose. You did it. You kept all the frustrations and let-downs in there. You are good lady! Chris"
01 Fri

Critiqued
"No one Waiting there for you" by @Electric Blue
"I just read this and I actually cried! I just posted a blog, a rambling one then, I read this and it echos how Im feeling. To raw, to real What right have they, our hearts to steal. Beautiful words, you do it from the h…"
01 Fri

Critiqued
"Rose Entangled" by @Morgana Tragic Proprietress
"Just reading your work, I love this write. I love the part which goes; I want to make you feel beautiful. It doesn’t have to be love. We could just be in the moment, That is powerful! You work packs a punch. Chris"
01 Fri

Critiqued
"the lady is a forest" by @theladyblue
"Just read your words. To me, it seemed to deepen after the first stanza, almost as if we were becoming part of the poem. Really nice read! Chris"
December 2009
31 Thu

Critiqued
"the wonder of a child" by @smilecatcher
"Really beautiful write! So many evocative images. Nestled under your heart, I love that a lot. Fantastic Chris"
31 Thu

Posted a poem
The simple things.
"One day, just a touch."
Open thread 17 lines
29 Tue

Posted a poem
War!
"Guns and bombs and gas, don't mention that!"
Open thread 10 lines
28 Mon

Critiqued
"Diamonds Shine" by @Electric Blue
"Nice post! Just a little window into that safe place-in the day but not yet fully part of it."
27 Sun

Posted a poem
A different ground
"A different ground."
Open thread 22 lines
27 Sun

Posted a poem
The birth of the dragon
"The birth of the dragon."
Open thread 24 lines
26 Sat

First critique offered
on "She’s Gone " by @Barbara Writes
26 Sat

First publication
Losing
26 Sat

Most-discussed work
Losing

10 critiques to date.
26 Sat

Posted a poem
Losing
"Just a moment, mid-June. When you might have."
Open thread 19 lines
15 Tue

Highest posting month
December 2009 — 5 poems