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Writing Poetry and of Poets

I will write of the gems I have held
Some in my mind others in my heart
Yet they are held with a love so pure
A thought that will fill eternity’s hold

There is a band of poets striving away
They are from all places with all thoughts
Here they play with words in tidy rows
Though we must take each word carefully

When you speak of their words, talk with calm
Be gentle with their lives as they burden you
Think of all they have been through or why
They come to us each day poetry to unfold

Whisper their words in your mind’s eye
Test the feelings they portray with yours
Walk in their shoes, feel their minds set
Free yourself to remember your yesterday

I will walk with you, as the now flows by.
You will teach me in your learning from others
Seek out new places to rest with the words
Let them ring out a vision of you, always.

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this one, first time I've seen it. I think that instead of the word [talk] you might use the word [speak]
I like the line: I will walk with you as the now flows by. It fits well with the theme of reading the work of the poets here. [ Band of poets striving away] It could use a little tidying up, but the warmth and feelings are definitely there. ~ Gee.
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Many thanks for your visit, I will tidy the piece up when time permits we are having a small weather problem at the moment.
Seeing that I use to go to Canada in the Winter times for quite a few years to me it is not as much a problem as others seem to have.
Our structure cannot deal with bad weather, but if we get global warming then it may switch off the Gulf stream then we will be like Nova Scotia during the winter.
You take care over there and my best to everyone,
Yours Ian..

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but
first three lines were in synch
all fourth lines out of it
was it intended to catch folks like me
who call themselves poets
unlike ye
Ianly

So you spotted the catch in this piece.
Take care young Bard, and keep writing,
Yours Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Thank you for writing a kind poem that feels as if it is addressed directly to the reader.
I love the way it sounds like a quiet dialogue with a friend.
I like the kind promise to be there and the soft prompt to walk in their shoes. Now I feel I could swap my ski boots to anything. Best wishes, yours, I

IRiz

Lovely to hear from you, I hope your learning and promotion of your works is going well.
I check your web page when I need to rest a while.
The workshop is going well, maybe we can soon make it and open ended place, to let all poets post to stream their own Sunku's.
I wonder what your next project is ???
Take care and know you are in our thoughts,
Youyrs Ian.xx

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Hello, my friend.
I am skiing, thinking, reading Oliver's poems, and a big shycology book by Kahneman.
Thinking about poetry and suffering.
What makes a difference between poem and whining is the way they look at the pain. Sunku is above of it is stronger almost as if It processed the pain into a higher form of thought
That is what I am thinking about. And you?

IRiz

i liked the way you've put it across "Sunku is above of it is stronger almost as if It processed the pain into a higher form of thought"... i support this view point...in fact should you get time you will perhaps witness it in the next Sunku I shall soon be posting...i hope it's a reflection of what you've said...

have a great time in some fun things you mentioned you are indulging in..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you very much.
Today I walk around Seattle and also decided to visit the local climbing gym. It is interesting to compare with my hometown.

IRiz

Tender words to this piece very good words you got here.
I don't see any errors in this piece your writing is dynamite keep on posting my friend.

Mario Vitale

Many thanks for your visit, I am glad you like this one,
I need to write some new pieces, so watch this space.
Yours with thanks, Ian..

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good to read your poems dear Ian. There is always a positive invitation there and a spirit that we all need to be able to keep writing.
Thanks for sharing.

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It is always a pleasure to hear from you, we cover the Earth in our ways, it would be wonderful if all could feel the love in our hearts, and the beauty of a good Spirit.
You take care out there and stay as you are always.
Yours Ian.xx

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