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A WORLD OF INDIFFERENCE

Fires rage across the globe
In places we never thought would burn,
The forests and the plains afire
Yet we still refuse to learn.

The ice fields and the glaciers
Before our eyes do melt,
Frozen sentinels of an ancient age
Victims of the hands of fate we dealt.

Tropical storms and hurricanes
Where we've never seen before,
Blow their evil winds of sorrow
In places we never may restore.

The raging rains pour down
On a parched earth as dry as sand,
With their power and ferocious speed
To lay waste across our land.

The flora and the fauna
The creatures great and small,
The corals in our oceans
Decline and suffer; one and all.

The future generations will inherit
The world we leave for them,
We must work to find the answers
Or our precious earth we will condemn.

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The poem "A WORLD OF DIFFERENCE" effectively communicates a sense of urgency and concern for the environment. The use of vivid imagery, such as "Fires rage across the globe" and "The ice fields and the glaciers / Before our eyes do melt", helps to create a strong emotional response in the reader.

However, the poem could benefit from more varied sentence structures and a more nuanced exploration of its themes. The repetition of the structure "The [noun] [verb]" in several stanzas creates a somewhat monotonous rhythm that could be broken up with more varied phrasing.

Additionally, while the poem's message about environmental destruction is clear, it could be deepened by exploring the causes and potential solutions to these problems in more detail. The final stanza begins to do this with the line "We must work to find the answers", but this idea could be expanded upon further.

Lastly, the poem's use of language is generally effective, but there are a few instances where the wording could be improved. For example, the phrase "Blow their evil winds of sorrow" seems slightly out of place, as it personifies the storms as evil, which may not align with the poem's overall message that humans are responsible for environmental destruction.

In conclusion, while the poem effectively communicates its message and uses vivid imagery, it could be improved by varying its sentence structures, exploring its themes in more depth, and refining its use of language.

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Hello, William,
There are places on our Earth where trees jut out from the ocean and the sea. These places used to be islands where people lived and thrived, grew food, and sustained life for living beings. No longer. Your poem grabbed at the center of our issues. The Earth is being destroyed. It will eventually replenish itself, but not with us onboard. Your strong, but eerie words remind me of the Buddha quote: "Until he has unconditional and unbiased love for all beings, man will not find peace." Thank you for sharing this piece.
L
I do wonder about your title - perhaps, "A World Of Indifference." ??

Thank you Lavender for your comments and for taking the time to read the poem. I particularly like your suggestion regarding the title of the poem. I like your suggestion so much that I am going to immediately edit the poem. Thanks again - Will

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Thank you for such a meaningful, moving poem.
L

and so eloquently written. You captivated so many of the world's issues within this poem. It was honest, expressive and meaningful. I cringe to think what future generations will be left with should things keep going the way they are. Well done!

~RoseBlack~

Thank you Rose. I appreciate you taking the time to comment and, of course, it's always wonderful when people react positively to your work.

Very much appreciated. All my very best, Will

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