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Words of Passion

Bless the letters and praise the words,
Passion to mourn the human pains,
Birds that flatter, flowers that daze,
Bless the letters, and praise the words.

Bless the letters and praise the words,
Pendants adorn the human strains,
Jewels that matter, gems to blaze,
Bless the letters and praise the words.

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments

Wow, it's wonderful to see you, I've missed you,

So to your poem it's Lovely full of appreciation.
It's got a musical tone.
Happy New Year to you and your Lovely family.

Thank you...Teddy

This was really quick. I'm thankful to be here with such great friends.
Please feel free to suggest anything to improve this piece
It will be appreciate it my dear friend.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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As we know, structured poems are not my forte, but as Asche has so kind pointed out it is your third line that just needs an extra push

Birds that flatter, flowers that daze,
Isn't it that you need to rhyme with daze?
Maybe birds that laze? As in sit happily ? I'll come back later, I am sure you will get much feed back in any case. X

Thank you...Teddy

I love your poem, particularly the repetition of "Bless the letters and praise the words."

I like your structure quite a bit, although if you had your third line rhyme internally as your seventh line did, I think it could help that a bit. Other than that, happy new year, and it's nice to meet you!

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Always great to see new friends reading my humble poetry. You suggestion is spot on and always welcomed. Looking into it.
Highly appreciate it.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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it seems like only yesterday that we last met but it was last year. Thank you for gifting to us this poem. I like it very much ~ I think that your title does not do the piece justice though as this is a serious poem with a powerful lesson within.

'Bless the letters and praise the words,' is an excellent line (now why didn't I think of that?) therefore the reader is entitled to well chosen letters and words to read and enjoy (don't forget that a word is always judged by the company it keeps).
Our wonderful Asche is quite correct in stepping out of the flames and pointing out the small rhyming (or non-rhyming) thing in your third and penultimate lines.  It makes for the very slightest of disappointments I think.  May I, please, play around a little and enjoy myself, mischievously juggling a few words around in your kind and thoughtful poetic appraisal here.

The Celebrated Word

Bless the letters and praise the words,
Passion to mourn the human pains,
Birds that flatter, flowers that daze ~
Bless the letters and praise the words.

Bless the letters and praise the words,
Pendants adorn our human strains,
Jewels that matter, Gems to blaze ~

Bless the letters and praise the words.
 

 

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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I really cant thank you enough for your accomplished and thoughtful constructive feedback.
I can't but appreciate each and every suggestion you've presented to improve this little piece.
I shall certainly look into them and take them into consideration.
Soon
Highly appreciate it... Always

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thank you enough sir Alan S. Jeeves.
Editted as suggested.

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off the top shelf Rula. Your amended title is so good (much better than I offered) When you don't post for a while you certainly return with a BANG. Well done dear,dear, Rula.

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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Really liked this one, succinct and says so much.

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First time to meet so I want to say to welcome to neopoet and and welcome to my page. Getting such a kind comment from a published poet means a lot.
Thank you so much.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Bless your edit and new title a fabulous piece of fine poetry. X

Thank you...Teddy

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